Originally Posted by
atmaster
The jewel of the poem should be/is intended to be "illusive eye" but I'm not sure what you mean. Did you mean the adjective to be something like, capricious, impulsive or fickle?
The phrase "Don't compassion me" is unique but out of sync with the simplicity of the other verses. Maybe something like, "Don't try to comfort (console) me" would work better.
There are some repeated typos like "i,m" (=i'm). You could MS Word software or a substitute to type your poems and use the spell check function before copy/pasting it here.