A Song i Wrote Called Struck By Lightnin

Shes never won the lottery but still has it all
She might not get the best fortune out of all the cookies
but stil is the luckiest
she doesnt even notice whats she has and
she even makes me a little jealous

(Chorus)
She has everything but yet nothing
She's not a supermodel but is still gorgeous
Your more likely to get struck by lightning
then to meet a guy like him
shes the luckest girl in the morld

No need to look at horoscopes
because her month will be sweet
and youll know she'll be happy
when she sheds a tear youll know he'll be there
sometimes when they are together
i imagine me in his arm
and holding me tight

(Chorus)

and I cant wait till the day
the days theres a girl singing about me and getting struck by lightning

(chorus)

and i think she just won the lottery

i am only 13 so this is pretty good i think

Ohhhh-kay....

You're just writing feelings down rather than lyrics...

Try to form song structures rather than put down what you're thinking at that very second.

Some good bits, but a little- very confusing

yea i have a problem with writing my feelings down and then they dont go very well together