hey, thanks for reviewing my lyrics.
well, i am a fifteen year old song writer that is new to this site
and i'm hoping to get some advice to make my creations even better.
i have an appointment to record this song in two weeks,
so i'm trying to get it to its absolute very best before then
so suggestions would be appreciated a ton!
anyway, here it goes
A Vision of Perfection
written for my best friend, jasey
[verse one]
and so her story opens again
a girl's left sinking inside but trying to swim
starving from truth and throwing up lies
the pain pours out her sorry eyes
a secret attempt to be thin
[course]
she must've gotten lost in a vision of perfection
if beauty is pain shes in the right direction
shes left behind her the purity of youth
to find such beauty in self abuse
[verse two]
what does she see when she looks in the mirror
distorted picture slowly become clear
as pounds fade yet bones appear
the mother's heart brake her father's fear
[course]
she must've gotten lost in a vision of perfection
if beauty is pain shes in the right direction
shes left behind her the purity of youth
to find such beauty in self abuse
[bridge]
why cant she see
what shes doing to herself
all she wants to be
is harmful to her health
watching her bend
watching her break
its tearing me apart
a scar i cant erase
[final verse]
yet she stays in this broken state of mind
starving from truth and throwing up lies
while purity is gained its nutrition she lacks
she forgets all the lectures shes heard in the past
a painful consequence has yet to appear
for the flawless tragedy of freshman year