Better Song Lyrics Competition :P

Before anyone gets touchy, I'm joking. XP

Basically, I have been looking on here every day and sometimes there are new songs, but most times it's just me. :P So, when I saw Night123's competition thread, I thought, now that would be a good way to get people to get lyrical.

Okay, the idea is every month I will give you a topic to write a song on, and then at the end on the 30th of every month (except Feb. obviously) and I will send all competitors a PM asking for a vote on the best lyrics.

First Place will get 5 points,
Second place will get 3 points,
Third place will get 1 point.

*IMPORTANT*
ONE entry per person
All entries must be placed in this thread otherwise your entry will NOT be counted.
Any votes that come through before I send out a PM will NOT be counted.
Any votes for yourself will NOT be counted.
Any votes for someone not entering will NOT be counted.

Now I've got the formalities out of the way, this is just a bit of fun, so...

The first topic is about a girl that has slipped into a coma. (And out if you so wish)

Let's get those lyric caps on!
Enjoy!

ok here's my song

Every night I wait with you
Staring at the ceiling
Wishing for you to wake
Asking for that pray

But in the deep of my heart,
I feel like I’m the one supossed to be
In your place.
And is it god who want’s this future for you
well if that’s like that there’s nothing I can do


but every night to wait with you
Staring at the ceiling
And wish for you to wake

I know this words will never reach you
But I keep trying and waiting
Like a lover waits her call

And I’m sick of crying, tired of trying
So I’ll leave this town and run away
bitter tears shed over graves,
are for words left unsaid and so many things left undone.
bitter tears shed over graves



it's like Idk XD, I did it in a weird moment so hope you like it

It's not up to me... It's up to the public to decide. *dodedededededededededeee* :P

All good, but you spelt staring wrong. (I'm not having a go, I'm just saying)

ohh sorry I'll change it

Hopefully people get to comment?

quick question. Does it matter how we do it, like do you want us to write about how she went into it, and how we want her to get out safely, or just about how her being in it is affecting our lives?

or does it not matter as long as it have some relevence to her being in a coma

ight heres my entry for this competition.


Please Awaken


when i walk through those doors,
and saw you lieing on that hospital bed
i stood thinking to myself
what my life would be like if you were dead

i wouldnt be able to live anymore
without you here with by my side
my heart would shatter, and drop to the floor
cause your spirit is what i need inside

i can only imagine what your seeing right now
with your eyes shut tight, darkness or light?
i hope you can hear me as i speak to you
dont let go, put all you have into this fight

i sit here at your bedside, praying above for you
your hand held to my heart tightly
i stare to the heavens with determintation
and i speak softy to God All Mighty

(Prayer)
Please awaken her from this painful sleep
your the only one who can bless her
she's put her life here into your hands
i ask for your forgiveness for her sins
she's not yet ready to leave us,
were not ready for her to leave us.
i begged you to let her awaken
her life has not been lived to its fullest
there is much she still has to do
let her see what the future holds
but first you have to let her awaken
(end of prayer)

i've finished my plea to god
i hope he heard my cry of pain
i hope you can hear me by your side
i hope his blessing comes down like spring rain

never will i leave your side, holding your hand in mine
cause i wanna be the first one to see openin of your eyes
you mean so much more to me than anyone i know
when you comeback, i'll be screaming to the skies

thank you lord, you kept your word
you've givin her back to the world
my heart you just made one again
from giving us back this girl

(final statement)
we all have those we love
those we never wanna see leave us
wether there sick, or in a coma
never leave their side, cause your love helps them fight
you love gives them reason to awaken.
give them someone to wake up to
in the end it'll all be worth it

it does not matter as long as it have some relevance to her being in a coma.

Yeah, people are allowed to comment, but no editing on the 30th please, and where did yours go?

what do you mean, where'd mine go?
i thought i posted it

not yours; acheramee

Nice thread, but mine is so much better! By the way, thanks again for the songs Rabbitdrive!

Mine > Yours :P

You don't have to keep thanking me.

Ladies and gentlemen, only 12 days left to go... (I think) Get in with your songs quickly.[/bump]

Don't remind me - I know it's too late! So this is out-of-competition. If it was sung by a female voice it might have even met your criteria (I've sung it myself, though, but never mind). By the way, shouldn't there be an August thread by now?

Here's "I feel - I live":


floating from the darkness
heading for the light
a thought appears from nowhere
settling in my mind

I feel - I live

I try to move my fingers
I try to use my mind
trying to remember
there's nothing I can find

I feel - I live

there must have been a past
though it's lost in a haze
there surely is a future
though hidden in a maze

I feel - I live


Bernd

I only just noted - your thread does date from August. I mistook your entry date to the forum for the entry date of the issue. So I'm in, aren't I? Well, the lyrics date from the year 2000, if I remember correctly, so I'm out anyway.

Cheers,
Bernd

I think that can count as 'in'. We're short on people anyway.

2 DAYS LEFT PEOPLE!!!

Okay, 'tis over