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    Default Figure It Out (rough Draft 1)

    I don't care what you say
    Its your fault I feel this way
    I don't care what you think
    Your constant lies are pushing me to the brink

    I dont care what you say
    I dont care what you think
    All I know is that
    You'r enot the boss of me

    Chorus:
    I listened to your lies
    I fell for your plan
    I hope your happy now
    I guess this is the end
    All the pieces fir together
    I see the big picture now
    I can't belive I was so blinded
    That I couldnt figure it out

    You tried to hide him from me
    And by some stupid fluke it worked
    If I could have just seen
    I wouldn't have been so hurt

    Why did you lie?
    Why did you cheat?
    As I sit here and cry
    I feel so incomplete

    Chorus:
    I listened to your lies
    I fell for your plan
    I hope your happy now
    I guess this is the end
    All the pieces fit together
    I see the big picture now
    I can't believe I was so blinded
    That I couldnt figure it out

    You told me i was your world
    That without me you couldnt breathe
    You told me not to worry
    Because there was no way you could leave

    I don't care what you say
    Its your fault I feel this way (way way way)

    Chorus:
    I listened to your lies
    I fell for your plan
    I hope your happy now
    I guess this is the end
    All the pieces fit together
    I see the big picture now
    I can't believe I was so blinded
    That I couldnt figre it out
    (couldnt figure it out)

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    I couldnt let the impression that it might sound like some of Ne-Yo's songs, if you know the artist
    Aconteceu
    Estava escrito assim
    Eu em vocÍ, vocÍ em mim
    Eu te encontrei
    Meu grande amor..

    Da li cu ikad moci da sklopim oci a da tebe nema..?

    Aut Viam Inveniam Aut Faciam!
    בועז, תתחתן איתי!

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    lol kinda yah....is that a good thing to you or not?

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    With some corrections it could be good for that kind of music
    Aconteceu
    Estava escrito assim
    Eu em vocÍ, vocÍ em mim
    Eu te encontrei
    Meu grande amor..

    Da li cu ikad moci da sklopim oci a da tebe nema..?

    Aut Viam Inveniam Aut Faciam!
    בועז, תתחתן איתי!

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    "All I know is that
    You'r enot the boss of me"

    im not sure i get how this fits into the song.
    it sounds like its about someone lying or cheating so i dont understand why you would say they arent the boss of you.

    but other than that, i think its really good

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    I like it, it sounds great. Wish I could hear the tune

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    The rest of the song is good but the first verse isn't... Sorry but it sounds like you're just trying to rhyme things and good songs don't go like that.

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