Corinthian (I beg you to comment)

You should have tried experimenting with a paper shredder after you wrote this.

I love this song. It is memorable, it has it's own unique feel, it's concise and it has a nice rhythm. You have achieved the goal of songwriting; you make people think!

Thank you raskolnikov, I really appreciate that

Originally Posted by DonFortunato

You should have tried experimenting with a paper shredder after you wrote this.

I guess your a negative person...

you should never expect everyone to like your text,
btw.. could someone help me by giving thoughts about the line "the rats all left my head/the rehab left me dead"?
thank you

i think it's a decent line

""the rats" is a 'word' for the delirium tremens (psychosis of chronic alcoholism), both lines tell the story of a person full of madness being drained and ending up boring. "

This is what happened to Hemingway. He was an alchoholic with mental demons, he took electro-shock therapy, then he couldn't write anymore and killed himself. I don't have an alternate for your line, but to get an idea check out the Rush song 'Losing It':

The writer stares with glassy eyes
Defies the empty page
His beard is white, his face is lined

And streaked with tears of rage.

Thirty years ago, how the words would flow
With passion and precision,
But now his mind is dark and dulled
By sickness and indecision

And he stares out the kitchen door
Where the sun will rise no more...

....For you, the blind who once could see
The bell tolls for thee...


Looking at how great authors have dealt with a similar idea can help with songwriting. Niel Peart (Rush's drummer and songwriter) makes allusions to two of Hemingway's novels: 'The Sun Also Rises' and 'For Whom the Bell Tolls', as well as subtly touching on the tragic circumstances at the end of his life. I like to reference Camus, Sartre, and Dostoyevsky; great writers inspire great songwriting!

hmmm thank you very much for this, that really helps

i like it - although i found it confusing

i think there should be less 'I''s in it

part from that i really like it

thank you

Why is it called "Corinthian"? To me it seems to have nothing to do with sex or temple priestesses at all.

Bernd

unique. stick with the rehab left me dead

Corinthian is also a character from the sandman (dream) series.. its the character I took a lot of inspiration from... this is sort of his story... the song might actually have something to do about sex.. but thats up to you isnt it?

i really like it..! cool lyrics..!!

It's great.

thank you guys!