"I wish" Comment PLS!

My second song!

It's not that good...

If my guitar will be fix tomorrow ...

And My guitar skills will be improve, I will make a guitar chords for my songs!

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“I wish”

I.
My life is broken…
My life is breaking up into pieces…
Because of you…
You’re the one who made my life solitary…
Because I thought you loved me too…
Oh… Yeah…

II.
You’ll feel sorry because you made a big mistake…
I wish I never see you…
I wish you never enter my life…
But, I think I’m being crazy because I fell in love with you…
‘Cause I fell in love with you…
A girl like you…
Ohh…



Refrain.
I just wasted my time…
I just wasted my love for a girl like you…
And now, this solitary (solitary) is getting worsen than before…
Every time I heard your voice…
Every time I see your face…
Is just bringing back our good memories (good memories)…

Chorus:
I wish I’m the one…
I wish you’ll love me too…
‘Cause I’m tired of having a solitary life…
I wish you change your feelings for me…
I wish this loneliness is over…
I wish I’ll have a happy ending…
Oh… C’mon…

III.
But, there’s a big possibility that you’ll never change your feelings for me…
And this loneliness will never end…
And now, this solitary is like a murderer killing me like its own victim mercilessly…
Why don’t you love me???
And, why do you hate me that much???
I just wish for your answer in my question…
But it seems I know the answer…
(Repeat refrain)
(Repeat chorus)

Bridge.
This feeling I can’t control for you…
I want to scream out loud…
That… I love you!!!
But it seems that you’ll never care for what I will say…
I want this loneliness to be end…
And never come back…
(Repeat Chorus except last line)

Outtro/Ending:
I’m still wishing now…
I’m still having a feeling for you…
I’m still waiting for you to love me back…
‘Cause I know…
I’ll be the one…
That you will love…
Ohhh…

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Next song: loveless

its pretty good, its a deep song and alot of people can relate to it in my opinion

My love life is not in good state so I'm composing a broken hearted song...

but if it will turn out and be in good state...

I'm happy to compose a love song!

BTW, thanks for th comment! I appreciated it a lot!

no problem, its always good to get feedback its helped me alot in my 9 years of song writing

9 years!

Wow!

I just started composing songs last, last week!

Note: Nobody know that I'm composing songs, only my bestfriend...

Even my sister don't know I'm composing song...

great!

the only thing is,
I think its to out in the open...
it's just my opinion.

Thanks for the comment!

What do you mean "it's too out in the open"?

revive.haha. It's been a year I guess.

My life is broken…
My life is breaking up into pieces…
Because of you…
You’re the one who made my life solitary…
Because I thought you loved me too…
Oh… Yeah…

Well, I would love to sing this to someone...
You are amazing at writing songs, especially if you're a beginner

I'm a beginner. But I already stopped, or I just don't have any time now.