Review my song pleasee!!!!

i started this song a week ago
and its not finished yet and i kind of want it to be a punk rockish song
a little like avril/boys like girls
so pleeassee review and give it your honest opinion!!! be brutal

so here is is (i dont have a name so its guna b called song )

song

I get up out of bed
I shake the sleep out of my heeaaad! So crazy, my minds shady

Last night I dreamed of you
But it knew it wasn’t truuee! Your gone, it feels so wrong

I knew I loved you
Don’t want to forget you
I know I have to
I need to move on now
Because
I’m dying inside.

(Chorus)
You hear my screams
Want to make me bleed
You don’t care for me
You don’t care for me
You know I loved you
Sweetest dreams never come true
You’re killing me, so I’m killing you


Your star was shining bright
Why do we always fight? I hate you, but I need you

You always get inside my head
Play these games I always dread. Just go away, far away.

You mess with my friends
You mess with clothes
You mess with my heart
Feels like the under toe
You mess with everything near me
Just stop, messing with me

(Chorus)
You hear my screams
Want to make me bleed
You don’t care for me
You don’t care for me
You know I loved you
Sweetest dreams never come true
Your killed me, so I’m killing you

if you have any suggestions
pleeasee done b afraid to write them

ahm could be called like "you dont care for me" or "dreamed of you"
ı like your lyrics and much more because some "sentences" belong to me hahaha

good song!

hahahaa i actually made it up
srryy if u some sentences are yours and thanks for the title suggestions
thanks for reviewing

sure!
and dont worry..its just about "Last night I dreamed of you
But it knew it wasn’t truuee" that's all
hope you didn't wrote it for your own experienssse could be "sad"
you're welcome volleyball15

hahahahaa nooo i dont plan on killng anyone
but i recently had a good friend who befriended this girl who doesnt let him talk to me
so i vented
and i got this
thanks for the coommentin
afet

ahahaha ı see..that's horrible what kind of "friend"
höeee
you vented it very good with that song,really it sound good,NİCE
and again again, you're always welcome friend

What happened to optimism in songs?

hahaahaa optimism died
and hahah yeeaahh u tookk the word out of my mouth afet (hoooooeeee )
and thannnxsss. i didnnt know if it was any good
i just need to learn to sing it now :P

ı guess not everytime a song must talk about love & love & love & loveeeeee..there are much more things to talk about hahaha
HÖÖEEEEE!
that's right
don't doubt about your song,it's good, then?
ı'm sure you will learn how to sing ,sure..write us when you do it!
we want to know

EXACTLYYY !!
specially since this one means sumtin
HOOOOEEEEE hahahaaa
im not that great of a singer though its guna sound bad:P

u shuld name this song "Sweetest Dreams'' it wuld match

I really like it! It is really good.

good job =)

awwwh thanks sooo much
hahaha thanks for showing me the loow showmethelow
okayy bad joke but wateverr lmfaoo

ı don't think so, ı think will not sound bad

what's your name volleyball?

hahahaaahaa Christine.
hbu?

hbu?
mean "you"? hahahhahaha

..if it is YOU, my name is Samanta

hahaha hi

hi
how are you? hahahha

hahahahaaa
im great how r uuuu ?