New Writer Here, Feedback please!

Hope you like it, from the heart..


Dreams
Way better than the best day ever
Always cool and smooth…never under the weather
Dreams
Oh Why! Why! Why!
No matter how high you fly
You have to come back down

Little boy, baby
Had the biggest dream ever
But he lost it all
Got tickled by a feather
Dreams may come and dreams may go
(But) Whatever it is that fills you
You have to let it show

Dreams
Nothing more than nightmares or ecstasy
This type of thinking’s never clear, never easy
Dreams
On the edge of yourself and you can’t step over
With a pinch and a slap its back to being sober

Ohhh, high up in the clouds
Over the ocean, at night
No ups or downs
Just you and me flying around, so right
But like the rain comes pouring
Just a pinch, pop up and we stop soaring

How, why, now back to a world of frowns
When you want so much, but all you need is all around
Things are nothing but a planted seed
Can't get enough, what to do with all these seeds
Just give me the air I breath, and I can't see why, and
Do we have to get rich or die trying

Please don’t think it happens in a snap
There’s nothing wrong with your picture
You need to know that
Just reach up in the clouds, and find your mind
Blind into a seedless sky makes you remember

Dreams
Way better than the best day ever
Always cool and smooth…never under the weather
Dreams
Oh Why! Why! Why!
No matter how high you fly
You have to come back down

Dreams
Nothing more than nightmares or ecstasy
This type of thinking’s never clear, never easy
Dreams
On the edge of yourself and you can’t step over
With a pinch and a slap its back to being sober

Ohhh, high up in the clouds
Over the ocean, at night
No ups or downs
Just you and me flying around, so right
But like the heat comes scorching
Up through cool air, out of site

Any response would be awsome! thanks

Guess not... lol

You want the in your 2nd post???

The answer is: People seldom go here... And almost people may go here but they're not registered... It might be you and me are the only one active in this board...

Anyway, nice song!

haha..once i sat here for a while waiting for a response i saw that almost no one posts in the review forum.

Thanks btw!

Dreams
On the edge of yourself and you can’t step over
With a pinch and a slap its back to being sober
Ohhh, high up in the clouds
Over the ocean, at night

i liked that.... is this a happy song?
I like it, its versatile...
pleace leave a comment on my new song "waiting for good things to come"

Thanks for the comment by the way!

Its an upbeat song, sounds happy, but its meaning is more depressing than happy.
I am about to read yours!

Tony

anyone else wanna share?

i liked it. Can I sing it in a talent show someday? Ahh no I am joking but if I ever did have a talent show (when pigs fly) I would so ask to use this it's a nice song =)

I like your song alot! it's very good and your lyrics fit together.
Can you please review mine? They are called: I want you.

Hey! Good song, could anyone check up on mine? I have 22.. I think on www.getyourgrooveon.com/kizza
Have a nice night.
BTW: I am 12. Not any older

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