reaching out

these are my first lyrics so please advise me how to improve thankyou.

Reaching out the sun breaks the nighttime
a stream of tear breaks my eye
3 days have past since she left me that way
to let her run i question was i insane

now i sit reading our long lost notes written in black and white

I remember memories through the breaking of the sun
she was so special second to none
in truth she just needed equality
but she deserved more than her right

now these note haunt me written in black and white

reaching out i wanna touch her shoulder
take her away from the burning eyes of everywere
she knows that im forever watching
she always loved my distant glare

now i sit reading our love notes written in black and white
now these note haunt me written in black and white
but the thing about my baby shes more then a story written in black and white

all feedback welcome as long it is constructive thankyou.

I can't really advise you, as all my ability lies in fairly evenly metered, rhyming lyrics, and to be frank I'm not someone who really understands how to work words into more organic structures. I enjoyed your lyrics though

thankyou for reading mate

anybody else gunna comment lol