ok i haven't been on this site for a while! well this is a start of a song i'm writing. constructive critisism is welcomed as always! Hope you like it

Looking back at our nation's history
I see all who have fought for liberty.
They sacrificed their everything
To stand up for what they believe.

You better give it your all or, give nothing at all
Because freedom is never really free.

I asked, "Why, why are we fighting
For something they say we already have?"
Then, one day, one day I realized life's a battle
That we'll never win

It pains me to know that so many have lost their lives
Fighting for the peace we can never seem to find
What's the point of violence if it doesnt solve a thing
Only reminds of the hate that's deep inside

You better give it your all or, give nothing at all
Because freedom is never really free.

I asked, "Why, why are we fighting
For something they say we already have?"
Then, one day, one day I realized life's a battle
That we'll never win

I asked,God "Why, why are we dying
For something they say we already have?"
A tear in my eye as silence answered me
Life's a battle that we'll never win

It pains me to know that so many have lost their lives
Fighting for the peace we can never seem to find.
You may think that they are silent, but they have so much to say.
You may think that they are smiling, but they're looking down in shame.
Oh, this couldn't be what they wanted,
But it's too late now things have gone to far

So you better give it you're all, or give nothing at all.
You better finish what you've begun

I asked God, "Why are we fighting
For something we're supposed to already have?"
A tear in my eye as silence answered me
Life's a battle that we'll never win
Life's a battle that we'll never win

How many hearts have to stop so you'll realize it's not worth that all?
Because the price of freedom's just too high

Heartfelt emotion there, I like it keep it up Dukey B

Thank you! I was really inspired to write this song. I'm glad you felt the emotion that was in my heart.

very nice.
thanks for you comment on my song btw.

you're welcome!



This morning (like at 2) I finished the song. I added a bridge and a couple of lines for the ending. Tell me what you think

It pains me to know that so many have lost their lives
Fighting for the peace we can never seem to find.
You may think that they are silent, but they have so much to say.
You may think that they are smiling, but they're looking down in shame.
Oh, this couldn't be what they wanted,
But it's too late now things have gone to far

So you better give it you're all, or give nothing at all.
You better finish what you've begun

I asked God, "Why are we fighting
For something we're supposed to already have?"
A tear in my eye as silence answered me
Life's a battle that we'll never win
Life's a battle that we'll never win

How many hearts have to stop so you'll realized it's not worth that all?
Because the price of freedom's just to high

I like it!

thanks!

ooh just posted the newest version of my song koncept

Yeah, I commented on it

I think you should re-edit the song with the new verses you added...personal opinion but don't take my word for it!

Hmmm? I already did lol