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ok i recently came up with a theme for a new song but im having trouble writing it, i can picture it pretty easy how i want it to sound. i need help with lyrics as well so please comment to start this song i want to be about a kid who doesnt realize what he has and is a loner then as time goes bye in the fight of life his friends are his unit in battle and they fight to the death and die happy because of it. if you want to know the rythm i kind of liked the piano tidbit in the very beggining of resistance by muse, only from where the piano starts playing till the words kick in. anyways here are my lyrics



here alone he walks
the lonely road of life
whatever shal he do
as time goes by
he will grow older, stronger and more willing to fight

fight, do not give in
no rest for the weary
so what if you die?
he fights to fight
no reason to live
alone surrounded on all sides
not a chance to survive

(chorus)
do not give in dear one
keep on fighting dont start dying
you are not alone in this unending war
you will stand there and fight valiently
fight for the ones you love
as they are not ready to die
lead them in the charge
accept that you will die and fight
for what is right do not give in
your friends are for what you fight


you walk the lonely road
shunned by many accepted by few
these few are your group, lead them on do not stop
you are their fearless leader
you all must fight the good fight
regardless of what you think
griping in the ranks will kill you all
find your unit dont stop moving
there is no rest for the weary

this is the cost of war
you will die regardless
fight to live
fight to fight
you run away from the inevitable
you will have to turn around
your destiny you must face

(chorus)
do not give in dear one
keep on fighting dont start dying
you are not alone in this unending war
you stand there and fight valiently
and fight for the ones you love
as they are ready to die for you
lead them in the charge
accept that you will die and fight
for what is right do not give in
your friends are for what you fight


no matter the pain you fight(untill your dying breath)
you fought valiently(and died well)
you are not alone(others died with you)
the sacrifice made eternally great(for friends are your only defence)
they come and leave one by one(protect the few you have left)
and tonight you will fight(fight to die)

(chorus)
do not give in dear one
keep on fighting dont start dying
you are not alone in this unending war
you stand there and fight valiently
and fight for the ones you love
as they died with you that night
you lead them in the charge
and accepted that you would die and fight
for what is right do not give in
your friends are for what you fought



if you like it or wish to suggest something plz do so as it will make it easier for me in the future

bump and need some comments people o.o