Cry

CRY
BY:BELL BELL NUNEZ & JERRICA TANNER



"Im crying every night and day,
I wanna bring it back to yesterday,
touch my heart and make it beter
its always rainig since youve been away....
Im crying day and night
just missing you
crying and crying,just missin you when your not here...
I think about the times we had laughed together!
the times when the sunshine
lighted up our rainy days
i know its sad to say goodbye.
Please come back to me its been raining since youve left.
I know you loved me and thats why
It hurt even more not having you here.
I wouldnt care if you hurt me some more.
Just as long as your right beside me.
Cause even i know love hurts sometimes.
But please just come back
back to yesterday
back to the times we laughed and played
just please bring back the sunshine
and take away the rain
just please come back....
to me.

Does anybody not like my song?

you have some mistakes in there.
beter -> better

its been raining -> I don't know if you can say so, but I sounds a bit strang....

there are already a thousands of songs discussing this theme....
maybe you could try to discribe your feelings more closely instead of telling about this guy who is not with you...
I think that would be more interessting....

Well its not really about a guy its a just a song me and my friend wrote in a class we take and we thought it was good and i just wanted some reviews on it but i really thank you for your help.

I don't think it's that bad, but you could be more explicit

Could you explain to me how?