Originally Posted by
Sewn Up
Very good job. I know quite a few people in this very same situation, and this is fairly spot on to what I see happening to them. I can see why MoonRide42 feels the way he does about the "grounded in my whole self" bit, but I see it as a very good double meaning. The way I read it, especially closer to the end, it comes across as only being whole during the use and later on being whole when trying to stop. However, I do think the last line of the song should be slightly revised to fit in more with the content of the rest of the stanza. May I suggest going from "Bow down to holes in my skin" to something along the lines of "Shut down the holes in my skin"? I think it would fit in with the perceived idea of recovering a little better. All in all, amazing work. Can't wait to see what else you've got!