Darkside (Revision part 2)

Hey everyone I'm back again with my second revision to this song, would've been done quicker but I had finals for school hopefully this is much more improved than the other two versions. Enjoy, please leave comments, critique away! P.S. it's a metal song so I hope the words fit, theres no story behind this song just a made up scenario.


I run away,
you hit the floor.
Your screams still ring inside my head.
Clouds cover what we've said.

Run away now,
from this dreadful fate,
I feel it coming it cannot wait.
now you see,
(the demon in me.)

Broken bones and bitter air,
how could this be?
I feel rage caged inside me
Break the chains and set it free

What is this thing inside of me?
It always brings me to my knees.
(My knees)
there's no emotion left inside,
Can't stop no matter how hard I've tried.

The evil's burning inside,
Time to hold on for the ride,
To kill or to hide?
That's up for me to decide

Darkness building,
(There's no turning back)
Nothing Shielding
(I'm on the attack)

RUN AWAY now before it's too late
my demon is coming, it cannot wait
so run away, be let free
be free from the dark side of me.

I'm not very fond of metal, and the lyrics are very dark. But I really like the way you express yourself.

I like the song, pretty dark and demonic as well, it like Unleashing hell on people that you won't notice who you hurt to.

thanks

Good job! This is much better than the last couple versions of it that you've posted. I'd love to hear the music to go along with it.