Alone on this road

My second rap.

STORY : Come back home after the end of the best relation ship of my life. Hard story, emotional.

Chorus :
I'm alone on this road,
Me and my best bottle,
Traveling through my head,
Trying to forgive and to forget,
But I succumb to my despair.


I'm traveling on this road,
Turning my back to you
My hate is over-loaded,
My brain is focus on you,
How can I deny,
- This broken tie
The truth in your eyes,
But i see clear in your lines,
There's no need to pretend,
- I recognize all your lies,
Maybe you want to apologize,
But I need time and distance,
See if you have persistence,
You'll never find someone like me,
There's nothing you can do, i'm free,
From all your betrayals,
I don't think you're loyal,
I'm destroyed,
I can't escape this feeling,
I can't put you out of my brain,
- For a better way of living,
And I don't know why, but I go insane,
You drive my crazy,
I can't stop calling you "My Baby",
- Hard inside, Simple outside,
I don't know why,
- But I need you by my side
Complicated, isn't it ?
I don't know where's the Exit,
My heart is hard as stone.
Yesterday's gone,
Tomorrow never come,
Maybe I'll come back home.
Or find somewhere that I could die alone.

Chorus :
I'm alone on this road,
Me and my best bottle,
Traveling through my head,
Trying to forgive and to forget,
But I succumb to my despair.

(Not finish yet)

Not bad at all. It kinda reminds me of The Black Dahlia by Hollywood Undead.
It's got a great tone, decent flow.....you seem to have everything working for you on this one. There's only a couple things I would revise though.

"- I recognize all your lies,
Maybe you want to apologize,
But I need time and distance,
See if you have persistence,
You'll never find someone like me,
There's nothing you can do, i'm free,
With all your betrayals,
I don't think you're loyal,
I'm destroyed, "

-I would consider saying "From all your betrayals" instead of "With all your betrayals"

"My heart is harder than a stone.
Yesterday has gone,
Tomorrow may never come,
Maybe I'll come back home.
Or find somewhere I could die alone.

-I would consider something like "My heart is hard as stone. Yesterday's gone, Tomorrow never comes, Maybe I'll go home. Or find somewhere that I could die alone." The decision's up to you, however I think little tweaks like the ones I mentioned would really help the feel, flow, and sound of what you've got.

Thanks a lot for your advices, it's pretty useful ! A lot of good ideas. Thanks