A girl named fate

Hey guys whats up. This is one of my bands songs that i wrote. We perform it alot it seems to be one of our more popular songs. we are a punk screamo band. now dont not read this just because of the genre. Tell me what you think and be honest.

Intro
Band yell(SCREAMING YOUR NAME)
Verse 1
Looking for the light
Serching for salvation
BUT ALL I FIND IS ALITTLE GIRL
Finalizing the situation
The design of life is unknown
Is it fate or us in control

Break Down

Verse2
LIVES INTERTWINING
People still dying
I dont understand this feeling
As i walk toward this girl
Lives of people in her hand
CHOOSING TO END IT
OR LET IT BLOOM
BUT SHES A EVIL LITTLE GIRL
Cutting lives short
Ending them with out notice

Chorus
We sit alone in a dark room
talking bout our past
ALL THE MOMORIES OF YOU
THAT HAVE COME AND GONE
Being remembered
Taking time
NOT REALIZING WE DONT HAVE LONG
Befor its taken away.

verse 3
The world around me crumbles down
The ground beneath me starts to fall apart
The sky turns black
All your lies are starting to show

Chorus
We sit alone in a dark room
talking bout our past
ALL THE MOMORIES OF YOU
THAT HAVE COME AND GONE
Being remembered
Taking time
Not realizing we dont have long
Befor its TAKEN AWAY.

(CAPS -screamed- none CAPS singging)

Personally, I'm a metalhead, but this looks a lot like the kind of thing that I would write myself. I can't really find anything that needs to be revised, especially if it's one of your more popular ones. Keep it up, I'd love to see what else you've got!