Hip Hop Song

This one contains my own feelings...Verse 1 is bout studies n not gettin wat i wanted Verse 2 is bout unrequitted luv n Verse 3 is bout people's expectations n quick 2 judge nature
Here goes nothin...

Intro
Intruder unwelcomed
but think hard
just lik i intruded u
u tresspassed by my life too
so i dont get yr cold hard gaze
this just shows yr frustration thats been misplaced

Verse 1
Dejected so rejected
i tried so hard but nothin can be ressurected
Then wat
shud i up n run away now
from this place that always reminds me of my mistakes
or shud i stay take on life
unpassionate n slow
pierced n frozen but not broken...

Verse 2
Now i try to change wats been done
suprising me change is easy to come
goin back to serve d last term n i find

Somehow it seems lik d old days
remindin me of both d ease n d daze
oh yeah not to forget d flarin flame that still dont fade
everything's d same except
u dont remember me or my face
nor d time neither d place
all these yrs n u can still bring tears
watever but dont this s*** look lik unrequitted luv forever Ha Ha

Verse 3
Disillusioned lies that were given never by me not by u
we just thought i cud make it through
but i didnt
Does this make u sad or will u show d flipside be mad
i had rather u stay calm n relax
watever will be will be right
so forget d future n just chillax

Thats wat i did
until i remembered those sneerin faces
dont know d first thing bout me
yet decieded m d one to be hated
well then back off
s***heads dont drag on

In d end i guess half d wrld disgusts me revokin fury
so i say f*** anyone that shud be f***ed
but leave d rest untouched
cause they d ones who deserve respect
dictates my self laws got that?

FYI f*** here is used as an expression of anger just sayin..
P.S i wud hav said leave comments but u wudnt anyway so i just hope u enjoyed it

Hi i changed my mind comment comment comment......

Hey you probably didnt expect such a late reply. Just saw this rap now and its very good. You rapped about stuff that is personal to you and didnt just go on about yourself which I liked. Im not really a great rapper myself so cant really tell you where to improve but this definetely was good. Keep it up