I need a chorus someone help

also tell me what you think please

All the heroes

Yo this song goes out to all the greatest heroes
the ones the made it through the hood, the ones that arent zeros
the ones that go out on the stage, kill it all, and make the doe
the ones that got away from all the damb po po

so heres my list of all the heros from top to end
my first is the best, the white boy eminem
my second is 2 pac who showed you cant make friends
my third is 50 cent who proved the hood is not protend
my last is lil wayne now this is it the end

can someone give me a chorus and some more lines?

Nothing comes to mind as far as a chorus right now, but I'll figure something out for you, just gimme a little while to think about it

Now for the inevitable criticism. It's so f'n cliche to rhyme hero with zero, I didn't like that at all. Nor did I like the second verse. Sorry, but this is the least enjoyable thing I've read from you yet.

k ty i need someone to tell me about the song rite? lol weather good or bad but thanks for posting a reply keep on posting to my songs and i will to yours

Hey man I came across your thread here just this morning, and well I don't think it is the best I can do ,but I guess it is better than nothing. So here it goes.

To all the heroes that have been here, rest in peace
To all the heroes that are here, keep doing what you best at
And to all the heroes to come, I hope you'll have a better life than the rest of us
I devote this song, to all the heroes
Born or unborn
Famous or unfamous
Peace!!!

(No offense if you don't like the last line it is the only thing that came to my mind at the moment.)

Ahum Ahum

Ayo, This goes out to all my Heroes
Molotova, but I ain't all about De Niro
This is fo' the ones on the block,
Poppin' shots,
droppin' hiphop like it's hot
Non Stop
Pop & Lock
When they out on Stage
Rephrase everyday
& Blaze y'all away
But Heyyy
They makin' Money
By speakin' bluntly
So here's the hero-list
Listen, I Insist
Pac is the most missed
Eversince he exists
So he's my very first
But Juicy gives me thirst
And eventho' it hurts,
Biggie is the second best on earth
Fo' what it's still worth,
Here's the third:
Word Up to Miss Hill
'Cuz Lauryn gets to kill
Any MC that will
Trick or treat her skills
Now up to number 4
We 'bout to settle the score
My first love will be my last
So Pac remains the last Outcast