Emotional healing (a work in progress)

This is a new one im working on, let me know what you think of what I have so far

When your thoughts race
And your pulse quickens
And you sink to the floor
Anxiety stricken
Don't hide
Take the time to analyze
Look your inner being in the eye
Dig to the root
Ask yourself why

Emotional healing
Don't be scared of happiness
So much opportunity in life
But all so easy to miss

This life is to learn
So embrace desire
Accept the whole
Rise above and take control
Take some time to explore your soul

Find love for yourself
Don't look for it from others
Because there isn't room for them and you
If you lean to hard
You'll fall straight through
So nurture yourself
With love and attention
Only you can provide that deep connection

Originally Posted by nork

When your thoughts race
And your pulse quickens

dunno if it fits in with your idea for the tune but instead of that you could have
when your thoughts race
and your pulse increases pace
sweet song btw

Originally Posted by Carpe dium

dunno if it fits in with your idea for the tune but instead of that you could have
when your thoughts race
and your pulse increases pace
sweet song btw

Thanks, glad you like it. I like your line but I kinda like the rhyme between "quickens" and "stricken", but I dunno, do you think the "quickens" part sounds a bit silly?

na bro everything in your song is up to you i was just trying to give you some choices either way sounds great to me
edit: and also could you look at my song shadow man? cheers