unfinished RAP

This is my first time i rote a rap

verse 1

I noticed something was wrong in my life
I felt like i was a being pierced with a knife
I was as scary as an eagle
louder than a deagle
People called me evil
Worse than kanevil
to go home i had to travel
so i can practise with my double barrel
people used to laugh
i used to cry
sometimes i hoped that id dye
but i knew one thing that if didnt use my head
i was going to soon be on my deathbed
i as a kid i didnt no wat to do
but the only thing i new i had to work it through
I really did try to hide
but people knew who i was inside

can yous plz tell me if is good