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  1. Molotova's Avatar

    Molotova said:

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    I just wrote this rap as a reply to this guy I'm battlin' with on another website, can someone please confirm that everything is written the right way ? As English is not my native language, I would like to have a confirmation before I post it. Thanks in advance.

    Oh please, u can see me as a piece of meat
    If this is how u'll treat your women to be,
    I guarantee, atleast one of them will leave you diseased
    Sweep any bxtch off the street & catch HIV

    How could u know how I dress when I possess the finesse
    To let you see nothing beneath my neck on the internet ?
    U say u jack off on my face, I'm embarassed in ur place
    Just another case of misplaced hate against a dame

    Knowin' I spit flame and yet u dare to call me names
    How can I step up in ur grill if u ain't got no game ?
    Sling ur dxck to this shxt or go rub ur mum's clxtoris
    Let her leak viciousness, lick it and get syphilis

    Though I knew u'd come up with sick shxt like this
    I'm kickin' it but I'm not killin' u out of politeness
    U won't get me pregnant, I don't open up for fxck ups
    What is your errand ? U'll get stuck so just sxck it all up
     
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    Molotova said:

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    Someone ??? I wanna reply to this guy fast !
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  3. Zachre's Avatar

    Zachre said:

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    Seems to be good, nothing noticeable. Except the last line, What is your errand? You'll get stuck doesn't really make sense. An errand is a chore, like going to get groceries.
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    Molotova said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zachre View Post
    Seems to be good, nothing noticeable. Except the last line, What is your errand? You'll get stuck doesn't really make sense. An errand is a chore, like going to get groceries.
    Aaah, I thought it was a message, , like what's your message U kno. Thanks man ! Any ideas how to make the last line work ?
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    Zachre said:

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    Hmmm, not sure really. If you want, just change errand to purpose, or goal, or something along those lines.