Originally Posted by
jessie zuppo
Wow, Doug!! This is your first poem that is esoteric! This really exemplifies your ability to diversify your writing. I am able to do this as well- but it took me years!! I also studied it in school. Like I've said before, you do have a gift. This poem, if it were a movie, would be like "Clockwork Orange"- totally bizarre, cult classic, and edgy...2001- awesome!!
I also see in what ways you have softened some of the rough edges of your poetry. In this poem, you seem to let the words flow similar to water out of a faucet...a 'stream of consciousness" (google it, and William Faulkner while you're at it) which is a preference of mine.
Your later work is much more controlled and story-telling- both are equally as strong!
love ya,
Jess