amaryn poetry and pics 2013

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    amaryn said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    To change the name on a Thread,Go Advanced.
    iPod in the Jungle;what can I say?It's cute!I joined your "in progress" group.I was writing Frankie a PM,touched the wrong thingamajig and ended up on your page.I defo will post some "works in progress".This is a good idea,as posting unfinished stuff in Lyrics Review never appealed to me.Now I've got a place to see how I'm doing.Good idea!
    "Ipod in the jungle" was inspired by a conversation between Wishin and me regarding "not being able to live one day without music"
    I suppose it could be better stll, as the title is promising in my opinion.


    To be sure: that idea was not mine, but Wishin OnAStar. Me too thought that's grand. So, looking forward to seeing you there too! I hope your unfinished stuff will also courageously be put there once in a while. I plan to do so. I'll start with the three you've mentioned this weekend.

    Thanks for the Go Advanced tip! I fixed it!
     
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    You know,I got there by accident!How do I get there on purpose?
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    You know,I got there by accident!How do I get there on purpose?
    Jolly good observation, Doug. Your humour is as usual abundant and unbeatable!
     
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    amaryn said:

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    selfish sods , that's what we are
    or do you think you have risen above it
    look at the sky, can you still see a star
    amidst the pollution, don't say that you love it
    to hear people talk on their cellphones all day
    closing their eyes for destruction and waste
    why do we have such peculiar taste
    can anyone show us the way?
    angels I see with blood on their wings
    sarcastic smiles telling horrible things
    an earth in turmoil, an alarmbell rings
    will soon come our very last day?
    Last edited by amaryn; 01-25-2013 at 02:04 PM.
     
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    Selfish Serenade:Another great piece,Amaryn.Now,let me say this,I do mean it with love,if you (and others)continue to write how bad things are,I think folks will get the feeling that,"Oh,there he goes again"or ignore it completely.That being said I've written a couple of "protest songs"(The Easy Excuse"and "Real Problems")The reason,I think,they had impact,was they were written with feeling and heart.Not pumped out on a daily basis.Do you get what I mean?If you said something that needs to said,that's great.But simply rewriting it over and over delutes the importance of the collective songs/poems.I could read them forever,but I'm convinced the message is on point.Let's try to change some minds now!!
     
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    you are a wise man, Doug. I know, overeating kills. "Never eat more than you can lift" said Miss Piggy. I do therefore indeed write different kinds of
    poems, songs and aforisms, some about love, others about nature and some about different approaches to life.

    I shall continue doing so- indeed, variety makes the skies so beautiful and fascinating and I will stick to it, Doug! Not to worry, my flower bro! Therefore "Rare Colour Love " "Destiny", "Ipod In The Jungle" and other, short aforisms.

    Thanks for underlining the point. Important for all of us.

    PS: I promise no owls at the moment
    PS 2: I had promised ThatsMeOnTheTrain a poem about selfishness
    Last edited by amaryn; 01-25-2013 at 04:04 PM.
     
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    amaryn said:

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    I walked past this house on a bright winterday
    and went in for a cuppa tea
    there was nobody else , just me and a cat
    who sat on a broken TV
    "I've been here all winter" I heard the cat say
    "though it's rather cold in this house,
    the reason, you see , is I play day and night
    with my best friend I have:it's a mouse"
    We chase one another, we roll in the snow
    we dance, play games and we sing
    you can stay for a while , you don't have to go
    we'll be here at least untill spring
    I wondered in fact, a mouse and a cat
    living together in peace
    but I was there, it's as simple as that
    for the first time I felt at ease
     
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    amaryn said:

    Default aerobics of love

    lift me up, turn me around
    whisper Venus in my ear
    closer, baby, please stay near
    make the nightowls disappear

    lift me up, keep me there
    see Odyssee sail the sea
    an adventure, you and me
    let the stormwind set us free

    lift me up, put me down
    let Athena show the way
    though the sun sets a new day
    comes with breakfast on a tray
     
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    @a moment of happiness: Wonderful
    @aerobics of love: Now that's more like it. This I love you're back on track.
     
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    amaryn said:

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    stars are twinkling in the skies, the night again arrives
    the mountains bathing undernearth the moonlight
    so vast and empty seems this world and yet so full of life
    a mystery it knows so well to hide it
    this vast forgotten land, I try to understand
    its mystery it knows so well to hide it

    the northern lights illuminate the country everywhere
    above the trees performing joyful dances
    Lapland where the snow can be almost blue and fair
    and gnomes accompany lots of romances
    oh land where northern lights console the long, long nights
    and gnomes accompany lots of romances
     
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    amaryn said:

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    your lips
    are a wine-red carpet
    behind them
    I enter
    a palace
    with ivory stairs
    I open the door
    of a room
    filled with heavenly odours
    and close my eyes
    to enjoy
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    I don't quite understand what you were trying to say. I know Frankie will call me out for asking, but......
    On the contrary, Doug. I agree. But I am reading 2013 in order--perhaps amaryn has already addressed this. It seems contraindicative.
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    Well, let's say "closed windows" seem exactly a kind of synonym to "introvert" whilst "open windows " could be seen as a synonym to extrovert;
    to let in fresh air once in a while introvert people therefore would rather need to "open their windows" /hearts

    I admit: complicated way of thinking. You caught me in the act
    OK, so here's the answer. Amaryn's poem, amaryn's explanation. Sometimes there's a glitch between languages. I can strain and see amaryn's point . . . but I'm inclined to agree with Doug, having had my "times" of introversion. During those, I would NEVER unlock or open my windows and usually not even open my shades or curtains! . . . as badly as my household and I might need it! :S
     
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    hey why don't you and I lay down

    As soon as I began reading this, I said to myself, this is a great SONG. And it was, as I read on to see "Chorus." Yes, defo makings of a good song, amaryn!
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    sometimes she is
    like a long distance phonecall
    I can hear her
    but I don't understand
    what
    she is saying
    Well done!
     
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    A Letter

    Tunnel Without Light

    i-Pod in the Jungle



    All very good, amaryn, in your story-telling style! Of course, I am partial to your story poems/songs. However, do not let me influence you too much. You have obviously been influenced by haiku practice. This is your new style of 2013. So don't lose wherever your own creativity takes you . . . trust yourself. I trust you, and can't wait to read page 4 of your 2013 poems!
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    you are a wise man, Doug. I know, overeating kills. "Never eat more than you can lift" said Miss Piggy.
    Best laugh of the day, amaryn!! Love it!


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    I walked past this house on a bright winterday
    and went in for a cuppa tea
    there was nobody else , just me and a cat
    who sat on a broken TV
    "I've been here all winter" I heard the cat say
    "though it's rather cold in this house,
    the reason, you see , is I play day and night
    with my best friend I have:it's a mouse"
    We chase one another, we roll in the snow
    we dance, play games and we sing
    you can stay for a while , you don't have to go
    we'll be here at least untill spring
    I wondered in fact, a mouse and a cat
    living together in peace
    but I was there, it's as simple as that
    for the first time I felt at ease
    This is great, amaryn. Again, I love your "story poems"!! Thank you so much for this one, with which I can really identify. Immediately, the idea of cat and mouse as companions struck me as wonderful imagery for our turbulent times; and an image that needs to be considered by people who will (sadly) never read or contemplate your poem. And so this world [which you wrote about previously] goes--those who wish for peace will also actively pursue it; those who are selfish will not be open to ideas that do not give them immediate and easy personal gratification. Still, the world needs poems like this one, dear.
     
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    Northern lights:fantastic!(Im running out of compliments!!)
    Your Lips:absolutely compelling!wine-red carpet;ivory stairs;it don't get much better than this!!Very poetic!
     
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    Thank you guys! See, what my face looks like right now
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    OK, so here's the answer. Amaryn's poem, amaryn's explanation. Sometimes there's a glitch between languages. I can strain and see amaryn's point . . . but I'm inclined to agree with Doug, having had my "times" of introversion. During those, I would NEVER unlock or open my windows and usually not even open my shades or curtains! . . . as badly as my household and I might need it! :S

    Indeed, Frankie! You admit you would NEVER do it during the period of introversion. Thus I say "would rather need to open".
    You see? That's the whole point