Down with me- Please review..

Hi.. This is a lyrics made by me for my demo song.. I think it need some fixes.. So I would really appreciate your comments and suggestions on it..

Title- Down With Me

You thought that you could move on
After breaking my heart in pieces
But it ain't no easy baby
Cuz i'm bringing you down- down with me

(Chorus)
That's right!
I'll make you cry
Begging for mercy- tonight
But now you already know
Its only just started
Cuz today you are going down

(Rap)- Hey girl your pictures in my hand
That tied to my memories
Your face your smile your lies
Everything i'm leaving back

Two words is all i got for you
**** you now u understand
And I'm taking you down-down with me

(Chorus)

That's right!
I'll make you cry
Begging for mercy tonight
But now you already know
Its only just started
Cuz today you are going down

(Bridge)
You're sorry now
And pleading loud
With the pain i used to hide me
But you cant run away now
Yeah i'm taking you down-down with me

(Chorus)
That's right!
I'll make you cry
Begging for mercy- tonight
But now you already know
Its only just started
Cuz today you are going down

Almost all the lyrics in this forum are awesome. So I'm sure that you guys can help me to better this lyrics. hoping to see replies soon

It's good. I tried to read it as a song and had difficulties. But the line lengths are not to long and not too short. Good job but can be improved

thank you for your review The music for this lyrics has already been made and I really wish to upload the song in youtube... So I want to know is the lyrics is worthwhile or not...

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