Wordplay for Wow recording

This is my first time to try to record. I'm doing it more-so in hopes of getting my lyrics and stuff I write noticed. More to come soon and hopefully some vast improving. I've never tried this before I've always been purely a writer and a hip-hop fan from afar.

http://www.reverbnation.com/jstokesjokes

check it out. Only one song posted for now, but like I said I'm going to keep at it. Let me know what you think. Any tips or anything would help. I am using already made beats that I have heard and enjoyed, I don't make beats myself just the lyrics.

Thanks!

Stokes...like the switch up on your flow....it a way reminds me of spoken word rap...like Sage frances a little....
keep droping em.. peep mine when you get a chance...I'm on reverbnation as well....look for Sk'nDeep you can't miss me.

oh yea man I've already listened to your stuff a few times through. Very good stuff I really dig the emotion you put into it.
i never realized how much work goes into actually recording it until recently.
Props my friend.