I would like to some suggestion on revising this songs, so anything appreciated

Immersed

For a child that dig deeper in emotions
The graves are for whose laid to rest
If there a way to swallows the pride then I want the answer that lies in my path

The lost souls can't be forgiven
Because they are known for their sins
I’m standing tall by the fence and
The water reflect by the moonlight

Because we are immersed, I look at your pain
Because we're deep in thought, you thinking the same
Not keeping scores and I don't look away
It’s what they are for and winds just don't sway
Because we all live in a world that is not the same
Because it's under the beliefs of shame

Hopeless dreams aren’t meant to purify
Some things meant wrongs to be seem rights
You see my heart but your purpose isn’t overhead
not living in tight, we are just loose laces

Where are we meant to fly?
Where we meant to swim across?
Across from places in endless night
My confusion came from this region

Because we are immersed, I look at your pain
Because we're deep in thought, you thinking the same
Not keeping score and I don't look away
It’s what they for and winds just don't sway
Because we all live in a world that is not the same
Because it's under the thought of shame

The reigns never end
But the places where rulers once lives are in Hades and heaven
They aren't here anymore
Last pray on the planet
It’s what we need

Because we are immersed, I look at your pain
Because we're deep in thought, you thinking the same
Not keeping score and I don't look away
It what they for and winds just don't sway
Because we all live in a world that is not the same
Because it's under the thought of shame

Because we are immersed, I look at your pain
because we're deep in thought, you thinking the same
Not keeping score and I don't look away
It's what they for and winds just don't sway
Because we all live in a world that is not the same
Because it's under the thought of shame

For a child that dig deeper in emotions
The lost souls can't be forgiven
Hopeless dreams aren’t meant to purify