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    Default my boat and the sea

    my boat and the sea‏ ‏‎"By dark1979" I wish to like you my dear

    I love the sea
    i wanna sail with
    my boat
    and don't come back
    and
    disappear
    disappeared from
    this crazy world
    this land doesn't
    Know the love
    know only the fear
    disappear fear of my
    heart
    when
    i'm in my white boat
    but my boat is afraid of
    the sea
    don't be afraid
    my baby my heart gives
    you
    the
    power
    and hope
    you're afraid of the
    unknown
    don't be afraid cause
    unknown
    is the most beautiful
    than
    in
    fact How i wish that this
    fact
    no more people know
    the
    secrets of the sea
    my boat has no small
    sail the Lord gives him
    the
    knowledge
    and wisdom
    i don't want to go back
    to
    the ground
    and i 'm all the things in
    the sea
    gone bad .. evil. hatred.
    concupiscence.
    selfishness. greed.
    racism.
    injustice and fear, but
    this
    surrounds me every
    beast
    of
    the
    authorities leads me to
    return
    to
    earth disgusting
    until you return this
    bad things to my body
    and enjoys torturing
    me and destroy my
    being
    this'll never win,cause
    i've
    spell
    holy
    it's afraid of them
    because
    they
    don't
    know only love
    front of God takes
    my weak boat and me
    now
    i wear black clothes and
    sailed
    without a return
    how beautiful sea
    in the morning i look
    the
    blue
    waves
    and hear their voice
    at night i meditate the
    fog
    the waves says
    come to the depths and
    take
    secrets
    i know the sea very well
    when
    you don't speak with
    him
    will
    be anger arises and the
    waves
    rise swinging my sweet
    boat
    and is about to sink
    how beautiful these
    moments
    make me laugh
    even out to the
    hallucinations
    and ecstasy
    I'm not afraid of
    drowning
    i'll sail and sail am not
    afraid
    in my hands the force
    sail alone don't fear
    don't
    retract
    sail on my own and i've
    hope
    i sail and my eyes shine
    of
    happiness
    i sail and with me my
    God
    speaks to me and wipe
    my
    tears
    i don't know a word
    impossible
    and i don't know the
    end

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    no one loved my pome why why? I tried until I write it, maybe because it is so sad.

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    no one loved my pome why why? I tried until I write it, maybe because it is so sad.‎‏ ‏close your eyes look into the dream

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    Dear dark1979,

    I like your poem. I like free-flowing style poetry. I could feel the pull of the sea and your trust in your white boat. Though the sea is uncertain, it is better than what is certain on the earth/land at this time--badness, hurtfulness, even evil. To survive, is it not better to enter the uncertain sea, trusting in God? . . . Going by sea, one leaves behind the good and the evil of humankind. Sadly, evil is overwhelming the good for now. Better to trust the white boat, the calm or boisterous sea, the light and the dark, the known and the unknown . . . than to stay and endure the inevitable "known" of hurtfulness.

    Please excuse my presumptuousness. This is my interpretation of your poem. It may not be what you meant. But such is the nature of art & poetry--it has a message which strikes each person differently.

    Never be discouraged of not hearing back from someone about your writings. Write for yourself. Writing means that you are honest. But then share it as a confidence in yourself. You are not afraid to let others know your heart's deepest fears and feelings. Sharing it means you're courageous, even if no one else responds.
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    Dear dark1979,

    Someone did, indeed, like your poem, and even commented on it.

    Perhaps no one liked my comment . . . ? :S

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    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    Dear dark1979,

    Someone did, indeed, like your poem, and even commented on it.

    Perhaps no one liked my comment . . . ? :S
    Thank you so much for your reply/comment Frankie Jasmine, and nice to meet you. I'm so happy because you read my poem, that. was so nice of you!! I like your comment so much and the first reply was so beautiful and smart!! I can not comment on all your reply, because I'm not good with English but I sure to you I understood what you said and I feel it. I love to be alone in the dark/sea and sail forever do not come back again...I would like to ask where do you live????

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    Dear dark1979,

    I am from Kentucky, U.S.A.! You are very welcome! I wrote that back in May . . . but I saw you were still around, so maybe you did not see it til now . . . ?

    Of course, I enjoyed your poem. Glad to share my thoughts with you and that you are pleased!

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    Your English is fine,your style of writing your own and your meaning very picturesek.See, I was born here and still can't spell!Keep up the good work and Thank Frankie J.for putting you in a place to get noticed!

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    Thank you so much‏ ‏for your response, Frankie Jasmine.
    You are from America this
    very nice because I love
    America so much, your
    country is very beautiful
    Nature, Rivers, the High
    buildings I wonder if you
    enjoy watching these
    things ? Or it is
    normal things for you. You are
    good people and so nice. I read your
    comment in May and I saw
    it in that month, but I
    could not put my reply in that time
    because I am sick I can not
    focus in the translation, my
    head hurts me a lot
    sometimes I feel like I live
    in another world, I'm glad that
    you enjoyed reading my
    poem. I live in this world
    alone and I need
    someone to talk with... I
    have a lot of questions
    about America so I hope
    to keep on continuity with me.
    Last edited by dark1979; 06-29-2012 at 08:07 AM.

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    Dear dark1979,

    Do you wish to reveal where you live--or maybe at least the country?

    Thank you for the very nice message above. I am sorry you have bad headaches--they can cripple one for days or weeks, understandably. It is very hard to concentrate also in a different language--that makes a different kind of headache! I know only one other language, German, and it is hard for me. We used to live there for several years, a long time ago.

    I want to refer you to another thread. There you can ask any questions you like about any country, culture, place, people or food. Here is the link:

    http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/ge...the-world.html

    This thread on Customs & Traditions From Around The World is to help us all get to know each others' cultures, manners, social rules, etc., better. I will be happy to answer your questions there, where everyone can see. Please do not be shy. The people on the thread are very nice.


    Frankie J.

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    Dark1979,I too suffered from headaches my entire life until I was prescribed AMLODIPINE BESYLATE 10MG !!!!Manufactured by LUPIN.I was prescribed this for high blood pressure,but it took away my headaches!!!!Note:Make sure (if you try to get this)that you make sure to get it from LUPIN,I got it from another maker and it didn't work!!I hope this info helps,it worked wonders for me.

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    Hi dark1979, I read today your poem and I like it, I know it express the way you are and the way you feel, and don´t feel sorry if you don´t receive attention, I have wrote several poems, tales and a novel, I set to 3 or 4 contest in my country and nothing happend, I felt dircouraged, but I know that writing is like the athletes, they exercise their bodies eveyday to be better and better, so is the writer, you must write about all the things that touch your heart, and read a lot of writeres and study composition or some literally book, etc, so go on, and you´ll discover that in the world there are many persons with a precious heart, like the ones who manage this beautiful site, and let us comunicate around all the world and even learn another language, or like our friends Frankie Jasmine and Doug Denslowe, (thank you too my friends).
    And take notice that in this place there are a lot of forums, is almost impossible to read and comment all, hope you try reading other poems and send comments to their writers. I like to know too where are you from and which is your native tongue. My native tongue is spanish
    Saludos desde México

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    Thank you all for your
    reply and your
    attention!!!! Frankie, Doug Denslote, mexico62, it is means much for me and I mean that.
    I am from Jordan and I live there, we are
    a small country only 6
    million people, living a
    normal life like other
    countries. Note, we are not
    bad as some people
    believe, the media in
    America does not tell the
    truth to the American
    people your government is lying on you about the things that happen in the world. My native language is
    Arabic. I will put some
    questions in the place that you told me about it, Frankie. I thank you all, from my heart.....
    Last edited by dark1979; 06-30-2012 at 07:10 AM.

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    Dear dark1979,

    You have not yet posted on the International Countries Customs thread. Even though this thread is about your poem, I want to respond to what you wrote directly above. In this world, we are all told lies about others. It is up to us as adults to realize that the earth is our home and we are all brothers and sisters, no matter where we live. We have the same original "parents."

    I have good feelings about Jordan because of a friend (from Jordan) I met at the University many, many years ago. (We lost touch when I left the University.) She asked us to call her "Fawzi." But I have never forgotten her entire name: Fwazia Abdullah Mullah Hussein!!! She was so sweet, smart, good-hearted, kind. Although I heard she was very wealthy, she never acted "high up". She was a very down-to-earth, nice young woman who was so kind and impressive. I never forgot her. These personal encounters in life form my opinions. Not what someone else "tells me" to think.

    Normal people everywhere want the same thing--life, love, happiness, peace, and security. Unfortunately, "the powers that be" (that is, high leaders of all countries, along with a minority of bad people) make decisions which disrupt the very things we all desire. I hope you understand my meaning. We are a family of humankind.
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    Hello again Dark1979, Mar haban, assalamu alaykum, How small is the world!, I´m so glad that your native tongue is arabic, I visited Israel Two times and meet a lot of beautiful people, most of people there speak english, hebrew and arabic, as I already speak a little english started to learn arabic and hebrew in this site, and now I hope one day I can go to visit Jordan, if I can go I tell you before, who knows. Please continue writing, studying and reading, arabic is a very beautiful, musical and poetic language, Ana Adrusus alugha al arabiya, Ana Bahebek alugha al arabiya. If you want, try to improve your english and learn other language, as french, german, italian or the beautiful spanish. Ia tik el afie, shukran, wa ma asalama.

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    This All thing Ain't making sense to me... I guess who wrote it died lol

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