Trading away your innocences

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  1. Krent_Calstro777's Avatar

    Krent_Calstro777 said: 06-12-2008 08:42 PM

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    I just want opinion about this, although it's kinda hard to explain how i got this idea XD.

    Attempt to wound a person's heart
    attempt to screw fraglie souls
    attempt to avoid a situation
    which will soon haunts you forever

    you're trading away your innocence
    just show me your true self

    you might have been faked
    you may have been dishonest
    it must have been why you're scared

    Trade it all back
    All your honesty
    One person's lusting
    Someone come and save me
    Save my soul
    You'll find words
    Show you the truth
    Someone come and save me
    Save and hold me now

    I know that love can be easily betrayed
    Knowing that it won't heal that way
    Grabbing onto someone's arm to push the others away
    But something tell me that it won't last forever

    Purge your light onto darkness
    Redeem your virtue for the best of yourself

    It might have been weird
    You must have been scared
    It may have been why i'm by your side

    Trade it all back
    All your honesty
    One person's lusting
    Someone come and save me
    Save my soul
    You'll find words
    Show you the truth
    Someone come and save me
    Save and hold me now

    Running away from me
    Putting me in all of confusion
    trust me enough
    that you can open yourself

    You're gonna hurt someone
    You're gonna toys with their feelings
    you're blessed with a sin that will need a lot of healing

    Trade it all back
    All your honesty
    One person's lusting
    Someone come and save me
    Save my soul
    You'll find words
    Show you the truth
    Someone come and save me
    Save and hold me now

    Someone save and hold me now
    Someone save and hold me now
    Someone save and hold me now...
    Damning Reficul: Song is like singing from the light whilst the emotions can be so raw from the darkness.
     

  2. Jester's Avatar

    Jester said: 06-14-2008 04:43 AM

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    Not bad
     

  3. Tracy-Turnblad's Avatar

    Tracy-Turnblad said: 06-14-2008 10:10 AM

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    good, but a little vague
     

  4. Krent_Calstro777's Avatar

    Krent_Calstro777 said: 06-15-2008 09:24 PM

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    well i think it's a little vague but i think i got it mixed up a bit thought with 2 things for some reason.
    Damning Reficul: Song is like singing from the light whilst the emotions can be so raw from the darkness.
     

  5. Restoration's Avatar

    Restoration said: 06-17-2008 05:58 PM

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    it's good to be vague a bit...
    if anything, it's a bit run on, the arrangement is off some what!

    try to write to instrumental music that you absolutely love.
    writing to music will help with the arrangment of what you are trying to capture and then you'll be able to translate what's on your heart and mind to paper then to the "public".

    peace and love
    "Blessed are those who face the PAIN life head on"
     

  6. Ninja TK said: 06-19-2008 03:41 AM

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    I completely agree with Restoration.

    But honestly, I liked it a lot.

    Keep up the work ;]