Blood of Promise (Revision 2)

I revised this song to a longer version than the one i used to make.

Mesmerizing a night of the flowing crimson flood
glancing me with tears stained by the rain of blood
I have stand by your side when your soul felts lost
The voices of a drop told me i've suffered memories loss
All the images of you vanished from my fall
Everything about you, I've lost it all

From the reason of showing me your sadness
I've failed to be the memories of who you've cherished
but it's doesn't stop me from recovering my dark secrets
only you will know from the dept of my flesh

Dear, My love, here my blood of promise
I gave you a part of me, our paths can't be amiss
From the battle of bloodshed, I stand above them all
It's all for my love's purpose, what we've shared cannot fall
I've survived the immortality and was shunned by death
I've taken your hand for a pledge, in turn there no regret

It's only seem the night strike as the darkness purges
But I'm the darkness that will slash away the cursed
Though there the timeless that hardly ever sway
Countless enemies want your heart to be slain
you whispered my ear to say "My heart taken by you"
I'm from the line of earth blood and my loyalty is due

Dear, My love, here my blood of promise
I gave you a part of me, our paths can't be amiss
From the battle of bloodshed, I stand above them all
It's all for my love's purpose, what we've shared cannot fall
I've survived the immortality and was shunned by death
I've taken your hand for a pledge, in turn there no regret

My love is the night's woman, the life of taken blood
I've slashed away those afterlives that betray the bund
The promise of the blood is the oat of sworn of duty
Eternal life and love embrace the look of your beauty

Dear, My love, here my blood of promise
I gave you a part of me, our paths can't be amiss
From the battle of bloodshed, I stand above them all
It's all for my love's purpose, what we've shared cannot fall
I've survived the immortality and was shunned by death
I've taken your hand for a pledge, in turn there no regret

Dear, My love, here my blood of promise
I gave you a part of me, our paths can't be amiss
From the battle of bloodshed, I stand above them all
It's all for my love's purpose, what we've shared cannot fall
I've survived the immortality and was shunned by death
I've taken your hand for a pledge, in turn there no regret

I've taken your hand for a pledge, in turn there no regret...

bump is it not good or something??/

I really like it actually. It's very very dark. I like your arrangement of some of the phrases such as 'memories loss'.

I put some of my own lyrics up for review too but no one has replied.
Started my own little social network for lyricists, with showcases and reviews etc. Its all very new at the moment but check it out if you like and I'll see if I can get some people to review this for you and I'll also review it properly myself. www.markmylyrics.com

Alex

thank you for your comment ^^ and i think i will join you in that site then, but since it new at the moment maybe i should wait for a bit??

You might as well join up and check back every now and then. Its all free anyway. There's a few discussions on there at the moment and I'll be doing some songwriting articles very soon. If you know anyone else interested in songwriting then you could tell them and it will grow faster

Thanks.

If you do post some lyrics though or link a song I'll definately review it for you.

I hope I get as good as you one day

maybe you're even better than me <3

This is an amazing song

thank, but it's not really related to anything in reality, this just based on the series called "dance in the Vampire Bund"