Best 16 bars: rap battle WITH JUDGING (Topic of Choice!!!)

Here's how it works. I start by posting 16 bars and a topic. For example, the topic might be "Rap battle" in which case we rep ourselves and slam the other. Or maybe it's "Girls" so then I post something about girls and your next rap has to be about girls. Whoever posts next has to post 16 bars on whatever subject I choose.

After two people post, the third person posts who wins. So there is only one judge, they decide who had the better rap. Then they can post their own 16 bars or wait for someone else to. Remember, when you post your 16 bars, you HAVE to post what the topic is, and whoever goes after you HAS to rap about that topic.


TOPIC: Club Song

yeah

runnin through this b*tch like a crash dummie
shorty whatchu want heard you axed for me
i can make it sweet you already know
bring it up to the floor them she get low

and the b*tch so fly like she got wings
man she spicy as the sun like hot wings
you don't even know she the f*ckin realest
every night in the club man she f*ckin kill it

now she all up in my head like a wet dream
wanna take her to the crib make that girl scream
plus we sippin on that bub yeah we gettin faded
rollin up to the crib now we gettin weeded

got two sweet girls in the hot tub
drinkin straight from the bottle as we make love
cuz we bang like the bass in the whole club
then i shoot on her face call it tough love

so hot so hot so hot so hot make it drop make it drop make it drop

Sweating as sounds bounce in the setting around me
Getting chicks to surround me, hear everyone shouting
With loud noises in a dark void with my heart joyed
Wishing it would never end like that part's destroyed

My bars deployed as I glance and see some eye candy
Fine, sassy, sexy hope they let me get some live action
Boobs be poppin', booty dropping, soothly topped I'm drooling droplets
Two good options, fool and knock them, rule like prom or choose to watch them

Take them home and ditch the club
Roll some up and smoke a dub
Choke a sl*t and make some love
Wrap with latex you wouldn't want a pup

Drink 'till your gone, Smoke 'till your stoned
Party all night like the world is gonna blow
To pieces, reach up to the air with your cup
Take a couple shots and never give up

Sippin syrup so you find me leanin before we hit the club up
Startin with that promethazine, n' usin sprite to fill the double cup up
Pull up like Jordan, smokin swishers, this text message's important, naked pictures
*****es line cuttin(double entendre), when I step out stuntin, but I'll only kick it with a couple, Chris Sutton(soccer player)

Shawty simply supple, but I'm bout to burst her bubble,
Cause she grindin like a groupie, gropin, feelin right through me
She place her hand up on my shoulder, I swear she could be my roller
maybe push my baby's stoller.... wait. wait. wait. wait. What am I saying....

... New song, new thong. Boutta get a bunch a brain, Jimmy Nuetron
Going through a gaggle of gorgeous girls, stopped on a snow bunny with golden curls
Body on point like a tight joint, she on fire, takin me a lil higher
I swear her name mary jane, she so dope bout to go insane

Told her to come into my world(double entendre), climb on top and let your hair whirl
The stretch limo's where I smoke my mary indo(ors) (reference to earlier), but no need to crack a window
While she screamin, windows steamin, its seemin like my stretch's on fire
But in reality, as your passin me, its just burnin rubber(double entendre)

Cheaters/Fake people=Next topic

****, "Who" beat me to it. Quickill, wanna just make this one a three way one for the first and then go back to your format afterwards?

Actually I'll give it to you Tre. I think your 16's better than mine.

Thanks my man. I was just lookin at yours and the verse you posted on that other thread and I have to say I enjoy your stuff, keep it comin. Its good to get some more people that can actually rhyme on here. Props.

good stuff guys...yo tre I think you got this one.

Gracias Sk'n.

Rap battle lets go son, lets go

Haaa pick the topic my man

Idk topic man, i was hopin u'd choose it lol

Yo, just for, well me too, battle about Marijuana haha

Ur lines mexi brick, go harder than last pick
Can't touch me, feds watch me, I move hash quick
Dro mixed with blow, four hits to let you know
This lightweight at the top, lonely, bouta drop the show
Catch the fade, half ya face melt off, winning Slade
Smash this roach, coach the only time u fly over the glade
Three peat, no feat, i jab, stab, bag like its dank
Ash the blunt force trauma riddled face, note the stank
Premeditated Oz, shake the ***** like hoagie
Adore me, I drop fiends, routes changed like a new fee
While they sleepin, bring the weepin wench, Jade wrapped up in Fence
Mother Mary, ***** burning, turning in the dirt, hence
Forth, a quart of gas passed all over the lad's ***
Light the green, sticky icky then go strike the last match
BAM. Its hits, no fits, mellowed out, no use in bellowin out
I crush u like my 5th blunt, **** found dead out South

Hoped ya'll liked the wordplay throughout

I'm sippin on this tonic, Smokin on this blueberyy chronic
Don't know what you heard, but mary is the topic
As I'm flying up above, givin you no love
Slaying *****es left and right,no need to put up fight
Cause I'm white boy gamin nerd, smokin on this herb.........

Yeah I'm not very good at this lol but oh well if you guys have any tips let me know
all advice will be accepted?