Originally Posted by
jessie zuppo
Doug,
I would have to thoroughly and critically look at your entire body of work to see if this is still my 'favorite'.
What I LOVE @ it is the chorus-- for the first time i actually 'sung' this piece of work, instead of just reading it. It is most. def. an excellent song- the rhythm is there, the beat is there, the chorus is there- this song has the ingredients to be a great pop song!
Yes, I do love it..one of the reasons I love it is b/c it is written using "I" statements. This beckons the reader in and keeps them focused through the entire song and gives them a glimpse into who YOU, AS A PERSON, NOT AS A SONGWRITER, are!!!
That level of honesty, vulnerability, and transparency is very attractive to readers b/c they can RELATE to you- this is a reason that
this one could be a hit, the more relate-able you are to an audience, the more popular the song is.
Jess