Another song I put together, this one took about 5 minutes. Please give me some criticism. I want good and bad; if you think it's bad, just tell me.
Thanks.



VERSE 1:
Promises made are debts unpaid,
I’ll pay this debt my whole life through.
I made the commitment, made the choice,
It took me in and drove me out, now I’ve no where to run.

CHORUS:
I promise to love, promise to hold.
I love you baby, I promise you that.
I told you once, I told you twice,
And baby, a promise I keep true.

VERSE 2:
Don’t make promises you can’t keep,
They’ll come back around and tear you down.
It’s hard to keep, it’s hard to live,
But this promise is true, baby I love you.

CHORUS x2

pretty good, I like it but you just missing a bridge, can't make a good one without it lol.

Mhhhhmmm I was thinking that too.
I'll add one, then put it on here.
Thanks.

Originally Posted by hart716

CHORUS:
I promise to love, promise to hold.
I love you baby, I promise you that.
I told you once, I told you twice,
And baby, a promise I keep true.

I loved the chorus ecspecially GREAT song!

Thanks =D.
I'm having trouble thinking of a good bridge to this song.
Anyone have any suggestions?

Song's don't always have to have bridges/middle 8s... Or if they do, they don't always have to have lyrics.

I know, but the song is a little bit short, I was just looking at a bridge as a way to lengthen it.

Great song, I can't beleive it took you 5 mins! I agree that it needs a bridge, i'll try write one, but it's quite hard when it's not your song cuz you don't know exactly what the writer is thinking of.

Ahhh I don't wanna spill out to you like you are all shrinks.
But I was writing this song for my girlfriend.
She never thought I loved her because I cheated on her before, and now I promised I love her.

So that's what I was thinking of if that helps.

Bridge:
Baby
Don't you know that promise is a big word
If you can't keep a promise I can't trust you
how can I trust you
I said baby
Keeping a promise shows you love me
How am I supposed to know you love me
Do you love me?
Do you love me love me love me love me

Originally Posted by Tracy-Turnblad

Bridge:
Baby
Don't you know that promise is a big word
If you can't keep a promise I can't trust you
how can I trust you
I said baby
Keeping a promise shows you love me
How am I supposed to know you love me
Do you love me?
Do you love me love me love me love me

I like this.
Let's see what other responces I get and then I'll pick one.
Thanks!

Ok, know i now what it's about my bridge doesn't really work. How about this version,
Baby
I know now that promise is a big word
I know that you don't think you can trust me
But you can trust me
I said baby
How am I supposed to show I love you
I'm making this promise that I love you
Yeah I love you
Yeah I love love you love you love you love you

Originally Posted by Tracy-Turnblad

Ok, know i now what it's about my bridge doesn't really work. How about this version,
Baby
I know now that promise is a big word
I know that you don't think you can trust me
But you can trust me
I said baby
How am I supposed to show I love you
I'm making this promise that I love you
Yeah I love you
Yeah I love love you love you love you love you

I like this one. A lot.
I'm gonna add this to the song.
Thanks =DDDDDDD

Originally Posted by hart716

I know, but the song is a little bit short, I was just looking at a bridge as a way to lengthen it.

So... As I've already said - They don't always need lyrics

Use music or something to fill it out.