To Be An Emcee

To be an emcee i personify expansion/
My rhymes need so much room my mind's like mansion/
On point off da mark orderly or random/
Every line is worth 5 mics every verse is an anthem/
& wit skillz as ill as mine i can have pillars climbed/
Wit binary language more imposing than Philistines/
Emcees like me'll rhyme as long as da flame lasts/
Wit elements twice da size an elephants frame has/
To be an emcee i had to struggle & train/
Run da comarades bare feet & suffer da pain/
I'm a verbal athlete my technique is far from common/
I spit 'till my lips is raw wit blisters on 'em/
My flows can punch holes in da walls of a sound booth/
Had engineers up in arms try'na down tools/
To emcee you shloud forget about groundrules & hit 'em
wit darts so hard that even da ground moves/
To be an emcee'll even force you to grow dreads/
Wit a steel pulse about da size a whale's chromozone gets//

Originally Posted by GreenBat

To be an emcee i personify expansion/
My rhymes need so much room my mind's like mansion/
On point off da mark orderly or random/

Was going really well untill...

Every line is worth 5 mics every verse is an anthem/

Every verse is an anthem? One verse is an anthem?
Maybe if you have OCD and can't remember much...

Wit binary language more imposing than Philistines/

Binary is 1 and 0, it's pretty hard to speak it.

Emcees like me'll rhyme as long as da flame lasts/
Wit elements twice da size an elephants frame has/
To be an emcee i had to struggle & train/
Run da comarades bare feet & suffer da pain/
I'm a verbal athlete my technique is far from common/
I spit 'till my lips is raw wit blisters on 'em/
My flows can punch holes in da walls of a sound booth/
Had engineers up in arms try'na down tools/
To emcee you shloud forget about groundrules & hit 'em
wit darts so hard that even da ground moves/

That piece is good, I like the way you flow...

To be an emcee'll even force you to grow dreads/

But to be an MC you don't have to have dreads, it's about your verbal venom, not your haircut.

Wit a steel pulse about da size a whale's chromozone gets//

It's chromasome is the same size as ours, there's just more of it.

Cool homie thanx for da response!

I practice beneath da stars throwing murderous darts/
Plus i'm known to spit bars on da surface of Mars/
I hope i told u retards to be nervous of sharks/
Yo your X marks da spot ***** mine marks da man/
& u getting a hand's not a part of my plan/
Pardon da Don cos my NuTron is starting a scan/
Turn da dial back to broadband as sharp as i am/
You'd have to rise really soft cos i cut where u stand/
That's just nuts damn how da hell i rhyme for days/
Dropping it cave-like check me by my primal ways/
Got u worried i don't speak u get a silent gaze/
Untill i blaze rap take it as a sign of rage/
Simon says nah Simon ain't got nothing to say/
Cos it's my time to blind u wit a shine of my ray/
Excessive see me examine extra effort i'm an expert/
I maintain da method of outsourcing my next word/
Playing charades i tell da stories using gestures/
Bubbles'll get burst so it's best if i left first/
Unlikely to get nursed da wounds gonna just get worse/
Like gangareen da lyrics that i spit is infectious/
Had u walking 'round sectors deader than spectres/
As i sneak my steel thru metal detectors//

Originally Posted by GreenBat

I practice beneath da stars throwing murderous darts/
Plus i'm known to spit bars on da surface of Mars/

Ok

I hope i told u retards to be nervous of sharks/

Ha ha ha ha

Yo your X marks da spot ***** mine marks da man/
& u getting a hand's not a part of my plan/
Pardon da Don cos my NuTron is starting a scan/
Turn da dial back to broadband as sharp as i am/

1. Neutrons can't scan anything, you scan for neutrons
2. Dial back to broadband?

You'd have to rise really soft cos i cut where u stand/
That's just nuts damn how da hell i rhyme for days/
Dropping it cave-like check me by my primal ways/
Got u worried i don't speak u get a silent gaze/
Untill i blaze rap take it as a sign of rage/
Simon says nah Simon ain't got nothing to say/
Cos it's my time to blind u wit a shine of my ray/
Excessive see me examine extra effort i'm an expert/
I maintain da method of outsourcing my next word/
Playing charades i tell da stories using gestures/
Bubbles'll get burst so it's best if i left first/
Unlikely to get nursed da wounds gonna just get worse/
Like gangareen da lyrics that i spit is infectious/
Had u walking 'round sectors deader than spectres/
As i sneak my steel thru metal detectors//

I don't understand the rest of that...

I don't like nowadsy rap to be honest, the 70s and 80s was amazing but nowadays it's just fishing words out of a hat and hoping for the best... No message and no real work going into the rhymes - Just my opinion...


If you want my opinion on your song truthfully:

Stop the swearing in every other line or verse, I don't mean be Will Smith but not even NWA swore 100% of the time.

Spell in English, look intelligent in your rhymes and people will stop to read them instead of judge you unfairly.