lost in the darkness

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I'm not into the heartwrenching style of lyric but they're not bad.

This is probably what i would define as bad lyrics. You need to improve mate.
Do yourself a favor and drop this song and write a new one instead.
Be original.
I really liked this line:
the night alone screaming, into the moonlight. It gives me pictures.

klukoklai.. thanx for saying this my friend i REALLY want to improve but i dont really know in which way.for example what you dont like in this song?its because i say they where ALL unworthy its not realistic or what?because these are feelings..anyway
please tell me why they are *bad* lyrics..i really appreciate this my friend..

cheers..

Originally Posted by Klukoklai

This is probably what i would define as bad lyrics. You need to improve mate.
Do yourself a favor and drop this song and write a new one instead.
Be original.

Dude, that's all you ever write:


Have you ever thought that noone who writes lyrics are original anymore?


Show us what you can do

friends... i dont understand what you mean *original* .. you mean like i stole from someone else or its not from heart?

1. I didn't say "be original"

2. I think he meant stop being all heartwrenching and soppy, use your imagination for other things to write about like... Serial killers or "through the eyes of a leper" or something... I dunno, anything

Sorry, for leaving you waiting.. I'm in a hurry here. What I mean is that the song is about whining about some matter and very straight forward. I do not mean that you have stole this from anyone or anything like that... gonna be away 5 days now... Cya guys.

btw; to ultimate worrier:
I'm not saying that I'm much better writing lyrics than any one else or anything like that.. And i have not seen any lyrics from you lying around this forum.
Cheers

Originally Posted by Klukoklai

And i have not seen any lyrics from you lying around this forum.
Cheers

I'm a drummer, not a lyricist but you don't have to be Picasso to know a sh*t painting.

Originally Posted by Ultimate_Worrier

you don't have to be Picasso to know a sh*t painting.

is this THAT bad? :/

hehe hello I'm back for today. What is your interest in this forum if you are not into writing lyrics for yourself? (asking Ultimate worrier)

Originally Posted by zoniq

is this THAT bad? :/

No, it's not bad at all, what that means is

"you don't have to BE something to give opinion, you just have to understand it"


I'm not a lyricist but I know enough good songs to know what makes a good lyric.

What is your interest in this forum if you are not into writing lyrics for yourself?

To help people.

The wholepoint of this forum and the whole message board is to help people.
I uise many forums, not just this one, on this message board.

i think that luke(worrier) is right in this..you dont have to write lyrics to be in here..you just can tell your opinion and that way you as he said it helps people realise things about their songs that the cant do it alone..

p.s. thanx for the explanation..
cheers..

Just asking questions .. this is my first forum apart from some really different ones

So it's not your first forum