hiyya everyone!!! this is a new song i wrote!! hope you like!!!

(verse1)
I have promised myself happiness
But if i keep waiting
And keep giving out chances
I would never be happy
So for once i have to think about me
I need to find what's best for me
So if i stop giving you chances
You'll know i was thinking about me

(Chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(verse 2)
Every time you blew your chances
You huirtme more than you know
Evert time you chose another girl
They broke your heart
You knew i would never do that
Yet you still chose them not me

(chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(Verse 3)
So, baby'
I don't see why you want another chance
When we both know you're gonna blow it
I was the only stable thing in your life
But now you lost me
Just like you lost every other thing in your life

(chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(bridge)
Don't come chasing me
Cause it's too late!

I love it.I really like the bridge

(bridge)

Don't come chasing me
Cause it's too late!

thank you very much!! do you have a email adress??

no,why

i was just wondering so we can keep in touch. o well.

I like this, I can relate to this song too! I really like the whole feel to it.

thank you.

Originally Posted by smileygal

hiyya everyone!!! this is a new song i wrote!! hope you like!!!

(verse1)
I have promised myself happiness
But if i keep waiting
And keep giving out chances
I would never be happy
So for once i have to think about me
I need to find what's best for me
So if i stop giving you chances
You'll know i was thinking about me

(Chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(verse 2)
Every time you blew your chances
You huirtme more than you know
Evert time you chose another girl
They broke your heart
You knew i would never do that
Yet you still chose them not me

(chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(Verse 3)
So, baby'
I don't see why you want another chance
When we both know you're gonna blow it
I was the only stable thing in your life
But now you lost me
Just like you lost every other thing in your life

(chorus)
So babe don't come after me
Don't try and stop me
I'm leaving
YOu had your chnaces
You blew them all
Now and sick and tired of waiting
So i'm leaving
And please don't come chasing after me

(bridge)
Don't come chasing me
Cause it's too late!

Too Late THE HOOK

V1
All I wanted was my happiness
But you always let me down
Now I’ll carry on without you
Because I’m leaving town

V2
Gonna start another life
Far away from you
Because you had last chance
When you made me blue

chorus
So baby don’t come after me
Begging for another date
My time with you is over
Cos you always come too late

Too late, too late you always come to late THE HOOK

The hook is the part of the song you remember! And sing walking down the street
That’s what you’re trying to create a memorable song the title 99 times out of a hundred is the hook
So use it as often as you can without overdoing it?
And try to break your song down to singable pieces like I’ve quickly shown you, these are just quick adjustment to your song because it needs to be in a singable style and a little more conversational.

I hope you can see what I mean.
lots of luck Jony Bek

This is really good there is a lot of emotion in your lyrics and the reader and hopefully listener can really feel that.

P.S in the second verse *huirtme* i think should be hurt me lol. And thanks for commenting on mine before =)

Originally Posted by jony bek

Too Late THE HOOK

V1
All I wanted was my happiness
But you always let me down
Now I’ll carry on without you
Because I’m leaving town

V2
Gonna start another life
Far away from you
Because you had last chance
When you made me blue

chorus
So baby don’t come after me
Begging for another date
My time with you is over
Cos you always come too late

Too late, too late you always come to late THE HOOK

The hook is the part of the song you remember! And sing walking down the street
That’s what you’re trying to create a memorable song the title 99 times out of a hundred is the hook
So use it as often as you can without overdoing it?
And try to break your song down to singable pieces like I’ve quickly shown you, these are just quick adjustment to your song because it needs to be in a singable style and a little more conversational.

I hope you can see what I mean.
lots of luck Jony Bek

The Hook doesn't have to be the song title however, you find song artists who name their songs one name, and don't even mention it in the song, however you still find yourself singing along in the street. I personally find it annoying when people repeat words over and over, I don't mind choruses being repeated but I hate words being said over and over again... Just boring.

thank you both guys!! thts great advice jony bek!! i will try to put tht in other songs of mine!! and thanx for the spelling correction!! lol