
Originally Posted by
Suveer
In the last sentence of the first paragraph, i think there's a mistake... It should be till not to, i guess. Also in the second sentence of the second paragraph, I'm sorry, but i didn't understand the line... it's end is a bit, you know, "exposed"... You could have used core, or inner me or something else other than just "heart"..(i'm just saying)... I simply Loved the thing you did at the ends of the first 2 paras; the 'to the end' and 'from the start'. It was impressive. Also the ends of the next 2 paras are in the same way... just the last line of the 4th para didn't sound quite new to me...

(but it doesn't matter!) The song's great, in all...

You'll rock with this one...! just put in some really good music. The rest is good. All the best

!!!