what do you think about my lyrics ?

Hi, im new here so be nice ... i jus wrote this a couple of hours ago randomly, thought i would have a go at it (a bit of funn i supoose) .. and wanted to know what you guys thought, if i need improving if so on which of part.
Enjoy!

Thanks x



Being scared to say enough
To stand up
Being done all because of love
You criticize
No made up lies
With such embrace

It’s because you care
But I’m still terrified
Of being a failure to you
And my own life
So I cry at night
Praying for a better life

Having minimal capability
Nor responsibility
Was foolish of me to not try

How you hurt me, has no visibility
Afraid to let you down I push you away
You break my heart
Until the next day
We restart
Again
Then depart

You make me this way
Your definition of perfection
Is the distraction
As you say
You say you love me
But never sorry

Honestly
Though we tried
You can't deny
The sound of my battle cry
At night proves
Ive lost the fight.

Oversensitive
Closeness
Have their difference’s
Like I’m defensive
I’m tired of trying
Trying to turn back time

To stand up and say I’m crashing
When the feeling is all or nothing
You made me this way
Punishing me for trying
To be what you wanted
You made me this way

anyone............. -_-

I like it for a fast upbeat song and if like a band like never shout never type of voice sang it....

I think it sounds good for real, but I think if you really want it to be a song then you should try to get some sort of chorus going. Not saying you have to, just something to think about.

Thanks for the advice much appreciated .. i will hopfully work on it soon x