Lyrics I started but not finished let me know what you think

Comments everyone



You knew it was coming to an end*
But you refuse to let yourself take It in
Everything you had,*
Is everything you want

Now isn't it all you want*
To change but you never see*
Anything come back in your own pathetic way
It will never be the same, never be the same


You knew,*but you'll never change
something inside*
You knew, but you'll never change*
Something inside you
Something inside hates!!!!
Hates!!

This is a metal song



And one more

Darkness is all you are
I can see it in you
I don't want to be anything like you
I'm nothing like you

I'll be what you never where*
What you never see
The disease you ****in became,
The disease that you are,
Has ended everything!,*

Something I ****ing hate!
Something I ****ing despise!
Is in you,
Is you

Let me know what you think they are just a start to them. I am going to finish them soon. Let me know what you think and if you like I will post the whole song when it's done.

This has got real passion behind it - as it's supposed to, I'm sure. It's dark, it's kinda creepy and it's powerful. I'm not really a metal person but I can imagine this would be very effective Nice start, methinks... if nice is the right word for it... :P

Okay first off! The first 1 I honestly.. Know how that feels, And I suggest you finish that one because I was stubborn like that ^^ so the first one is awesome bro, good work, finish it for the sake of yur bud Shadow xP

N the second one, ehh.. I like how you made it dark and murky. But, idk just not as awesome as the first one BUT don't you dare stop reading cause your songs caught my eyes in seconds. The second one can easily be related to people, and I like that ALOT xD

Keep writing pleaseeee, n I see that your a junior member. Welcome to the forum! hope to see you around the forum more often, I'm Olivia BTW. see yah

Originally Posted by Katie13

This has got real passion behind it - as it's supposed to, I'm sure. It's dark, it's kinda creepy and it's powerful. I'm not really a metal person but I can imagine this would be very effective Nice start, methinks... if nice is the right word for it... :P

Thanks man. I will keep writing.

Originally Posted by ShadowLeeSharp

Okay first off! The first 1 I honestly.. Know how that feels, And I suggest you finish that one because I was stubborn like that ^^ so the first one is awesome bro, good work, finish it for the sake of yur bud Shadow xP

N the second one, ehh.. I like how you made it dark and murky. But, idk just not as awesome as the first one BUT don't you dare stop reading cause your songs caught my eyes in seconds. The second one can easily be related to people, and I like that ALOT xD

Keep writing pleaseeee, n I see that your a junior member. Welcome to the forum! hope to see you around the forum more often, I'm Olivia BTW. see yah

Thanks I'll keep writing