Some kind of nursery rhyme lol... Review it

My heart is my castle
And the sweetest nestle
For a bird which won't fly away
For no reason, some fine day
Won't peck up all my love grain
Something for me will also remain
So I could sow corn of happiness
Could alight calmy in my nest
I would weed our garden
From sorrow not to harden
Affection must be watered from time to time
With caress, because lack of it, is a crime
I would plow our full of whispers field
In order to harvest the love rich yield

I really like it! Reminds me of Owl City's lyrics.

Originally Posted by Tracy-Turnblad

I really like it! Reminds me of Owl City's lyrics.

Are you not ironic? Metaphor used here is dull and formulaic! It took me 4 minutes to write this...
Is that a good material for a song? Put this text through? Because as you see, it's unfinished.

no one want to give me some advice?

Hmm I'm not native speaker of English... and I don't know the Anglo-Saxon at all. As I mentioned above. I've used so simply rhymes. Is that acceptable in English Poetry/Songwriting?