my boat and the sea "By dark1979" I wish to like you my dear
I love the sea
i wanna sail with
my boat
and don't come back
and
disappear
disappeared from
this crazy world
this land doesn't
Know the love
know only the fear
disappear fear of my
heart
when
i'm in my white boat
but my boat is afraid of
the sea
don't be afraid
my baby my heart gives
you
the
power
and hope
you're afraid of the
unknown
don't be afraid cause
unknown
is the most beautiful
than
in
fact How i wish that this
fact
no more people know
the
secrets of the sea
my boat has no small
sail the Lord gives him
the
knowledge
and wisdom
i don't want to go back
to
the ground
and i 'm all the things in
the sea
gone bad .. evil. hatred.
concupiscence.
selfishness. greed.
racism.
injustice and fear, but
this
surrounds me every
beast
of
the
authorities leads me to
return
to
earth disgusting
until you return this
bad things to my body
and enjoys torturing
me and destroy my
being
this'll never win,cause
i've
spell
holy
it's afraid of them
because
they
don't
know only love
front of God takes
my weak boat and me
now
i wear black clothes and
sailed
without a return
how beautiful sea
in the morning i look
the
blue
waves
and hear their voice
at night i meditate the
fog
the waves says
come to the depths and
take
secrets
i know the sea very well
when
you don't speak with
him
will
be anger arises and the
waves
rise swinging my sweet
boat
and is about to sink
how beautiful these
moments
make me laugh
even out to the
hallucinations
and ecstasy
I'm not afraid of
drowning
i'll sail and sail am not
afraid
in my hands the force
sail alone don't fear
don't
retract
sail on my own and i've
hope
i sail and my eyes shine
of
happiness
i sail and with me my
God
speaks to me and wipe
my
tears
i don't know a word
impossible
and i don't know the
end
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my boat and the sea
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no one loved my pome why why? I tried until I write it, maybe because it is so sad.
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no one loved my pome why why? I tried until I write it, maybe because it is so sad. close your eyes look into the dream
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Dear dark1979,
I like your poem. I like free-flowing style poetry. I could feel the pull of the sea and your trust in your white boat. Though the sea is uncertain, it is better than what is certain on the earth/land at this time--badness, hurtfulness, even evil. To survive, is it not better to enter the uncertain sea, trusting in God? . . . Going by sea, one leaves behind the good and the evil of humankind. Sadly, evil is overwhelming the good for now. Better to trust the white boat, the calm or boisterous sea, the light and the dark, the known and the unknown . . . than to stay and endure the inevitable "known" of hurtfulness.
Please excuse my presumptuousness. This is my interpretation of your poem. It may not be what you meant. But such is the nature of art & poetry--it has a message which strikes each person differently.
Never be discouraged of not hearing back from someone about your writings. Write for yourself. Writing means that you are honest. But then share it as a confidence in yourself. You are not afraid to let others know your heart's deepest fears and feelings. Sharing it means you're courageous, even if no one else responds.Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 05-31-2012 at 12:29 AM.
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Dear dark1979,
Someone did, indeed, like your poem, and even commented on it.
Perhaps no one liked my comment . . . ? :S -
Thank you so much for your reply/comment Frankie Jasmine, and nice to meet you. I'm so happy because you read my poem, that. was so nice of you!! I like your comment so much and the first reply was so beautiful and smart!! I can not comment on all your reply, because I'm not good with English but I sure to you I understood what you said and I feel it. I love to be alone in the dark/sea and sail forever do not come back again...I would like to ask where do you live????
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Dear dark1979,
I am from Kentucky, U.S.A.! You are very welcome! I wrote that back in May . . . but I saw you were still around, so maybe you did not see it til now . . . ?
Of course, I enjoyed your poem. Glad to share my thoughts with you and that you are pleased! -
Your English is fine,your style of writing your own and your meaning very picturesek.See, I was born here and still can't spell!Keep up the good work and Thank Frankie J.for putting you in a place to get noticed!
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Thank you so much for your response, Frankie Jasmine.
You are from America this
very nice because I love
America so much, your
country is very beautiful
Nature, Rivers, the High
buildings I wonder if you
enjoy watching these
things ? Or it is
normal things for you. You are
good people and so nice. I read your
comment in May and I saw
it in that month, but I
could not put my reply in that time
because I am sick I can not
focus in the translation, my
head hurts me a lot
sometimes I feel like I live
in another world, I'm glad that
you enjoyed reading my
poem. I live in this world
alone and I need
someone to talk with... I
have a lot of questions
about America so I hope
to keep on continuity with me.Last edited by dark1979; 06-29-2012 at 07:07 AM.
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Dear dark1979,
Do you wish to reveal where you live--or maybe at least the country?
Thank you for the very nice message above. I am sorry you have bad headaches--they can cripple one for days or weeks, understandably. It is very hard to concentrate also in a different language--that makes a different kind of headache! I know only one other language, German, and it is hard for me. We used to live there for several years, a long time ago.
I want to refer you to another thread. There you can ask any questions you like about any country, culture, place, people or food. Here is the link:
http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/ge...the-world.html
This thread on Customs & Traditions From Around The World is to help us all get to know each others' cultures, manners, social rules, etc., better. I will be happy to answer your questions there, where everyone can see. Please do not be shy. The people on the thread are very nice.
Frankie J. -
Dark1979,I too suffered from headaches my entire life until I was prescribed AMLODIPINE BESYLATE 10MG !!!!Manufactured by LUPIN.I was prescribed this for high blood pressure,but it took away my headaches!!!!Note:Make sure (if you try to get this)that you make sure to get it from LUPIN,I got it from another maker and it didn't work!!I hope this info helps,it worked wonders for me.
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Hi dark1979, I read today your poem and I like it, I know it express the way you are and the way you feel, and don´t feel sorry if you don´t receive attention, I have wrote several poems, tales and a novel, I set to 3 or 4 contest in my country and nothing happend, I felt dircouraged, but I know that writing is like the athletes, they exercise their bodies eveyday to be better and better, so is the writer, you must write about all the things that touch your heart, and read a lot of writeres and study composition or some literally book, etc, so go on, and you´ll discover that in the world there are many persons with a precious heart, like the ones who manage this beautiful site, and let us comunicate around all the world and even learn another language, or like our friends Frankie Jasmine and Doug Denslowe, (thank you too my friends).
And take notice that in this place there are a lot of forums, is almost impossible to read and comment all, hope you try reading other poems and send comments to their writers. I like to know too where are you from and which is your native tongue. My native tongue is spanish
Saludos desde México -
Thank you all for your
reply and your
attention!!!! Frankie, Doug Denslote, mexico62, it is means much for me and I mean that.
I am from Jordan and I live there, we are
a small country only 6
million people, living a
normal life like other
countries. Note, we are not
bad as some people
believe, the media in
America does not tell the
truth to the American
people your government is lying on you about the things that happen in the world. My native language is
Arabic. I will put some
questions in the place that you told me about it, Frankie. I thank you all, from my heart.....Last edited by dark1979; 06-30-2012 at 06:10 AM.
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Dear dark1979,
You have not yet posted on the International Countries Customs thread. Even though this thread is about your poem, I want to respond to what you wrote directly above. In this world, we are all told lies about others. It is up to us as adults to realize that the earth is our home and we are all brothers and sisters, no matter where we live. We have the same original "parents."
I have good feelings about Jordan because of a friend (from Jordan) I met at the University many, many years ago. (We lost touch when I left the University.) She asked us to call her "Fawzi." But I have never forgotten her entire name: Fwazia Abdullah Mullah Hussein!!! She was so sweet, smart, good-hearted, kind. Although I heard she was very wealthy, she never acted "high up". She was a very down-to-earth, nice young woman who was so kind and impressive. I never forgot her. These personal encounters in life form my opinions. Not what someone else "tells me" to think.
Normal people everywhere want the same thing--life, love, happiness, peace, and security. Unfortunately, "the powers that be" (that is, high leaders of all countries, along with a minority of bad people) make decisions which disrupt the very things we all desire. I hope you understand my meaning. We are a family of humankind.Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 06-30-2012 at 07:08 PM.
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Hello again Dark1979, Mar haban, assalamu alaykum, How small is the world!, I´m so glad that your native tongue is arabic, I visited Israel Two times and meet a lot of beautiful people, most of people there speak english, hebrew and arabic, as I already speak a little english started to learn arabic and hebrew in this site, and now I hope one day I can go to visit Jordan, if I can go I tell you before, who knows. Please continue writing, studying and reading, arabic is a very beautiful, musical and poetic language, Ana Adrusus alugha al arabiya, Ana Bahebek alugha al arabiya. If you want, try to improve your english and learn other language, as french, german, italian or the beautiful spanish. Ia tik el afie, shukran, wa ma asalama.
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This All thing Ain't making sense to me... I guess who wrote it died lol
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