Clarity is when you know
The inner road,yours to take
a very fine line to tow
Where ignorance settles to grow
Wisdom itself dares to shake
Clarity is when you know
Seeing the world through a window
A plethora of choices to make
A very fine line to tow
The day checks to a slow
A bared mind in its wake
Clarity is when you know
What makes the heart flow?
Emotions,whirlpool like a lake
A very fine line to tow
Knowledge comes and stays with a glow
Now robust, formerly as a rake
Clarity is when you know
A very fine line to tow.
P.S I welcome constructive criticism, please feel free to express your opinions. Thank you.
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Villanelle 3: Clearville.
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Cool, I am not very familiar with Villanelle, but I know it can be hard to convey it into something natural that does not halt itself. But I think you did a good job here and I enjoyed it for what it is
Last edited by Eccer; 03-11-2013 at 05:01 PM.
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Wasn't familiar with villanelles myself until about 2yrs ago, i started writing them because, as you said, it's a bit difficult to convey a message while writing within borders which you must adhere to. It's a little challenge i took up.
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Cool cool, I will consider it myself sometime. Seems very interesting, and it is a challenge to face!
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This is cool!I almost feel like getting towed.
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Thanks Doug, you're gifted, words never desert you, i think.
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Hi! I am especially fond of the clear line of thoughts here, Curiosity
I find this one therefore a true little oasis in a desert.
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