Heartbreak (collab in the works with my friend lil ben)

[KidAcrossTheStreet]
I walk down the street,the whole world seems to shake n I start to fade away...To a state of mind they call heart break...
[Lil Ben]
Our girls broke up with is that day...my heart began to freeze..and my mind began to fade and Kid's eyes became a haze...
[KidAcrossTheStreet]
We met on that very dreadful day...The day she told me "were done" and walked away...you couldnt imagin my pain...6 months together and nothin' gained,just a load of heartbreak
[Lil Ben]
A big brotha full of respect...and yet heartbreak is all i get...Derpressin?,Yes...
[Kidacrossthestreet]
My eyes were full hate Covered by my shades,Heart was like a roarin blaze,full of jealousy and rage

Hey, Check this out, this is a pretty decent work as of now. It's shaping up to be a B or A. I like the I walk down the street,the whole world seems to shake n I start to fade away...To a state of mind they call heart break... it is very telling about breakups.