If only she knew (part 1of2 tell me what you think)

looking down at the earth below
all i see is darkness
lies ,greed,war is all i used to see
but now i see a light
a girl shinning bright like a star in distant space
always laughing with a smile on her face
till she is alone.....

(chorus)
she cries whens he alone
she has no one there
no one knows her like i do
no one knows her story better then me
If only she knew
she was never alone
ive always been there for her
helping fight the darkness away
so she could smile
never have i seen anything so beautiful
if only she knew
what i really felt for her
a feel forbiden by heaven
if only she knew maybe she wouldnt cry
maye she'd smile all the time
if only she knew!
(chorus end)

everyday she gets blamed
for things that arent her fault
all the time she gets her heart broken
she doesnt know who to trust or let in
she feel all alone
yet she still smiles until shes alone
then she cries a river of tears
i wish i could tell her how i feel

(chorusx2)

i try so hard to contain what i feel
but the feeling grows and grows
dont know how long i can hide it
is it possible to hide something so real and so right
a feeeling forbiddened by heavens angels
i can feel it bursting out of me
i risk falling far with broken wings
what am i sopost to do
where am i sopost to go
WHAT AM I SOPOST TO DO
WITH THIS FEELING GROWING INSIDE ME!

(chorusx3)

This is good, and I like the idea, a vision of love from a heavenly being? But the structure needs a little more work. I don't know the music, but the chorus is really long. I can't imagine how you would work that. And the last line needs a little more creativity. But it's a great start, and I don't think it would take much to make it really good