Prototype

I’m alone
I’d like to reach inside and touch my soul
I’d like to look to the sky and see a god
I’d like to touch his hand and know he cares and loves
I’d like to live by his infallible fair laws
But I feel his contract is fraud

I’m alone
I reach out to touch something and in doing so
I’m slowly and politely, and continuously erased
I’m gradually feeling more miscellaneous and de-faced
Yet Still I try to raise my hands and graciously applaud
But I feel that somehow my existence is wrong

We’re alone
We walk the streets in recurring waves
With millions of other people all fighting to stay sane
We cut and measure and ameliorate our every fault
One day we’ll be commodious of mind and never flawed
One day we’ll all become god

I want to steal the cancer you try to kill
I want to cherish it forever more
I want to penetrate your every imperfection
It’s the only thing that makes us human anymore

Probably sucks but these are the first lyrics I've written so be gentle. Criticism is welcomed however.

No need to ask about being gentle, because I think there is some real promise all the way through this. Careful with big words like 'ameliorate' unless you know you can make it sound good in song

Structure the verse-chorus arrangement and this could easily pass commercial muster. Good stuff.

Originally Posted by Grendels

I’m alone
We walk the streets in recurring waves
With millions of other people all fighting to stay sane

I like these line the most. Another verses are nice and deep.
It needs just rework structure because it seems to me more like poetry than lyrics.

I really love this! To me, it highlights everything that is wrong with the human way of life and the way society works. Deep and meaningful.

"I want to steal the cancer you try to kill
I want to cherish it forever more
I want to penetrate your every imperfection
It’s the only thing that makes us human anymore"

Pure genius...