A Dive in Unbelief

(This is my first ever (sort of) "full song"… so it's gonna suck. but say something, at least, please!)

A Dive in Unbelief

I'm nothing in a sea of static
The world rushing right around me
They all want me to be ecstatic
About what I want to be
oh yeah

I believe, conceive, but I'm not at ease
I fell right in, but can't find my way back
These thoughts, I fear, are like a disease,
Doubt, reaching for a heart attack

I'm in a pool of red water
Wading in the entrails of my past
It seizes me to wonder
Am I ever going to last?
like this!

I frankly just don't understand
Drowning, my eyes close to ambiguity.
Will you be polite and give me a hand
And pull me out into congruity?



…and that's it. Thanks for reading. Please say something about it now (if you're going to criticize, constructive criticisms, please ).

It would be great if someone said something? Guys?

I like this bit "I believe, conceive, but I'm not at ease
I fell right in, but can't find my way back
These thoughts, I fear, are like a disease,
Doubt, reaching for a heart attack"

I'm a little bit confused about "They all want me to be ecstatic
About what I want to be"
I was wondering if maybe you'd like "They all want me to be ecstatic
About what I don't want to be"

And good vocabulary, very nice

Thanks for commenting.
You're right, I should change that! I should have noticed.

Loving this I like the sentiment and the rhyme's lovely and the lyrics are really clever I think it's really good.

Thank you!
Some constructive criticisms, too, please?