All my raps. Please review :D

Goes with One Beer by MF Doom instrumental

Wake up in the mornin, feelin like ObamaNation
Can't remember last night, who brought the Haitian?
See unseen patterns when eyes go Asian
Bring back the silver standard, *****es lack patience

***** is fish, thinkin I did a rain dance
Umbrella at home, shuda kept it in my damn pants
Doper than ya sista's favorite crackhouse
Al Green like brus sprouts
No bouts, remove doubts

Take notes, I'm the cloud of the class
Brains 'hind the op, they shocked a black man upper class
Not that he smoke grass or failin to pass
Nevermind the intelligence, the flowers say it won't last

I sell pounds, end up at the back of lines
Rosa Parks mentality, I'm cuttin that fine white line
Like Julio tryin to make a funeral
Revivn ppl like Jesus with SS numbers as usual

Copyright 5/27/11

I go by E.Juneyah when I rap
Ill end up chaning it soon
Explanations will be added if needed.

Imma just put my raps and stuff in this thread

Call this one Cross

Spittin lines, maybe they'll transmute to gold
If not, someones gettin splattered 'fore they get old
I pay ur weak lines no attention
Label it as mexican brick and call posion prevention

My eyes are usually low, my mentality pretty high
Soon as I enter the room, u can hear all the sighs
Cuz they know imma cut through their **** like its school
Then deny em access, segregated pool

The truth is subjective so I tend to change the topic
Never one for code, so never focused on objects
You *****s don't come close like I'm decomposing slowly
Point is that I'm sick so you can't even try to fold me

I'm doper than sex with X trojans
Rhymes got u *****s stuck like its quicksand
Double meanings, littered round the hood like Coke cans
They just came to come, never thought they were true fans

[No chrous/hook, purist in tht sense]

The moon falls faster than my mood after a coke sess
So ****in hungry, creepin the night for MC flesh
Not a delicacy but hey its worth something
Keeps the survivors for thinking about writing

Me I keep em fresh like the coroner
The rhymes I mean, they gleen with the sense of importance uhh
Shits hotter than a summer down in the plantations of Georgia
Eatin all these rappers, no matter the flavor

Contracted to build the perfect cell
Reinforced bars just to make it seem like hell
Damned nearby rivers so the flow is sporadic
Like my killing spree, AA says I'm an addict

Purer than Fiji, emulatin the Fuher
Which means I'm an artist, paintin without any humor
The image is shaky as I speed down the highway
Checkin names off the list, wondering who to slay

Copyright 5/27/11

E.Juneyah

Unlike the first one, came up with this on the spot. Reviews for both wud be nice. Any upcoming ones as well. No watered down bullshit cuz that won't help me

Okay, no watered down BS, try posting in the correct forum for a start:

http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/rap-lyrics-review/

Was in the process of it when I saw this reply lol
Thnx tho

No worries.

To Lemonade instrumental, by Gucci
Probably Last post here, will be in rap review from now on

Pale in comparison, I'm Vader, ya'll r Harrison
Armed to the teeth, put braces on the garrison
Leavin tracks in messes like dead addicts
So above average, my egos up in the attic

No messages, this rap is like ya cellular
King of the ****in game, y'all address me as sire
Handin tickets out to shows showin Lucy
Lines of *****es, guised as fans, all of which tryin to meet me

Victims tryin to see who can ****in screech louder
Im the last monster, Jef Dahmer
No choice, u last longer
If u step back and let the king conquer

Look, I'm come to beat, you weak MCs, English skills were gained last week
Gave the X to Malcom and raised the fist from her cheek
Staring like I speak Navajo, even made Gucci mane say Cold
How come he spits nice lines yet never crosses the finish line

Returned like Christ, identity hidden I'm pullin bank heists
Pretty nice, pretty nice, till I crush u with my pick of ice
Dark so I got no lice, Killin is my secret vice
So watch me stack the bodies like *****s be stackin chains of ice

Copyright 5/28/11

E.Juneyah

Wrote this yesterday after I had some ATF and was listening to Orange Juice by EarlWolf. This is heavily influenced by them, infact I don't consider a rap cuz I used their flow, just an oppurtunity to see if I need to work on double meanings, metaphors, all tht stuff.
I wud love any feedback, both of my threads got none :C so idk
Hope u all at least like the wordplay and try to figure it out, I'm not rapping with a purpose until I'm confident I got the basics down

To Pigions Instrumental, song by Earl

Tuned in for the classics
Lyrics dirty like glass ****
Leaving MCs coughin up like they passed it
Caught the flow like a deer tick

CDC says I'm too sick
So they logged on and say that there's nothin about it
They tell me I copped it, I claimed I was born with
The sickness that kills all I touch, King Midas

So answer the question
What do you do when I look your direction
And tell you I plan to blast ur *** with good intetions

I came here to show that I'm the bestest
That at my worst, the **** is spit is like abstesos
Causin death among those who resist and
No matter what ya say, dnt expect a helpin hand

I cruise first then proceed to come crashing through the wall
Kool Aid man ****, dnt think I dropped the ball
I shoot first, ask questions after the rubber rips
The elixir drips from my now cum covered black ****

Copyright 5/28/11

E.Juneyah


Lol still just messing with the words. Like this one most in terms of lyrics

Originally Posted by Zarex

To Pigions Instrumental, song by Earl

Tuned in for the classics
Lyrics dirty like glass ****
Leaving MCs coughin up like they passed it
Caught the flow like a deer tick

CDC says I'm too sick
So they logged on and say that there's nothin about it
They tell me I copped it, I claimed I was born with
The sickness that kills all I touch, King Midas

So answer the question
What do you do when I look your direction
And tell you I plan to blast ur *** with good intetions

I came here to show that I'm the bestest
That at my worst, the **** is spit is like abstesos
Causin death among those who resist and
No matter what ya say, dnt expect a helpin hand

I cruise first then proceed to come crashing through the wall
Kool Aid man ****, dnt think I dropped the ball
I shoot first, ask questions after the rubber rips
Elixir drips from my now cum covered black ****

No chorus
Verse 2:

Grab a friend, ill still slap ya
Then shove her in the trunk like Elmers secret factor-
Reewind the moment like I died in Persia
Goddamn the sand proves more resilent than her

Radio backup for the raid I got sacks down
Chillin at compund, rifles ready to dent crowns
****, we got a kid so go swipe her
**** Dora, Swiper go through it like ur Casper

Mission Success! Like I just played some May Cry
Girl comes out swingin like Mrs. Woods. Why?
Saw heads 'plode like a virgin for a cumshot
Snipers took aim, risked collateral tho I said not

Look here, civies gotta be held dear
Can't go shootin, ****in errbody, perverts bring fear
Walked off, blood on my shoes, gotta break the news
Called the Sarge, trial ballon: They had the ****in blues

So the girls cryin, saw deaths like its Nam 2
Hand on her back, face red like she bouta puke
Walked off, hit the bar

Verse 3

I drop bombs like Engola Gay
Disregard lives, peer pressuring *****s today
People ask where I'm from
I reply that the cat is currently not at home

Pay me no mind cuz I know you don't attention
Rappers fail to learn, lock em in detention
I kill for free cuz I'm currently on
A killin spree redder than hair of Ron

Born in a manger, grow up w/ the Ranger
Black one exactly, mighty morphin killin danger
No question I'm the dopest one yet
When you come to visit, try to invest in 2 vests

End of the day like a Scooby crew kid
Solvin crimes to turn eyes from my momento vids
**** that, imma cross the line with cids
Think you're nice, wait untill u try to taste this

Copyright 5/29/11

E.Juneyah

Next few raps will prob have meanings, like real ones on issues if I'm stil lfeeling that way tomorrow.
Any feedback is good feedback, I wanna be awesome and ill post explanations up in this thread or as one thread for you kids who may not get it all.

K no more

Just gonna flow on this one



My thoughts run and my pen goes across
Never in agreement, seems the point is lost
So instead they drop quick, intention is that I'm sick
Comin across with a sneeze, with a face like cheese

That means the thoughts are lost whenever they cross the holes
And I suppose through the holes is where my life will flow
Breath in, breath out, gettin ready to shout
The worlds not ready, enough reason to pout

Alternate ways to read this, either way you're defeated
I'm lettin words do the damage, steady attackin like good phage
Switch it up, got a new doc, who'll tell if my seed
Will end up with the sickness to piss on every new page

Fear what you don't know, Florida kids and the snow
I'm coming with a vengance, shits serious, I gotta go
So of course that means dnt hold it in, just let it flow
Just let it out, a screech, I preach, of course its in the bin

Can't make up my mind, prolly cuz I'm not a *****
So decisions, decisions, I make incisions till u twitch
And when u do, its overdue so I'm stampin-I mean stompin
Morale of the story, there was none, just remeber I'm king


Hope y'all at least get some of this
No line has no meaning

Imma young evolving pyschonaunt
Avoiding claps by jacking off
Dressed the raps like Two Face
Lacking some simple taste

I move first, claim I'm covered in thick dirt
A slash for cash, hidden blades will do all sorts of hurt
Complex like Z, so don't think Ill give up the key
Locked up in the mind, safest place they agree

So spend all night, German officers failing in their plight
Teo try and overcome the combinded Western world's might
Frustation growin at failure for results
So the Fuher comes in and starts treating them like adults

Floating on nitrous gas, reminding me of dank *** hash
The grinder catches most of the white, crystaline drugs at last
N2, ill pass on that
And get me a big old blunt, we're makin sure is fat


Another one of the obscure ones, gl

[Verse 1: Earl Sweatshirt]
Juicebox, tank top, tube socks
Dude stop, forehead shiny like a new Glock
Two shots fired at the Excursion we were swervin' in
All purpose verses with a passion for servin' kids
Empty out your purses on an immature crime spree
Eyin' up the nurses with some gloves that read I squeeze
Who the **** said to speak, Mr. Me-Is-Siamese?
Even Christ said "Christ, he flows quite nicely"
Hypebeast's highly likely to bite me
And try to high five me, but I just give them high threes
Cause y'all don't get two, touch me, I'm the ****
Sue me, if you got an issue, grab a tissue
Mediocrity is odd to me
*** as far as your eyes can see, who the best? They holla me
Nombre, Ho-lay ****, I don't spit crack, I spit cocaine crisp
I ain't ****in' with it if it's no payment (Why?)
Cause everyone knows payed dues don't pay rent
I'm dope like the coke that I'm laced with
Dreams what I'm chasin', flow hot it's chafin'
This is why I'm hot? No, that is why I'm blazin'
Dilla jacked Nick, I am shinin' like the diamond that I'm draped in
But I don't wear jewelery, it's HUF over Louis V
Excuse the endurance miss, this critic thing is new to me

[Verse 2: E.Juneyah]

Crossed like Christ so sons gonna feelin might
Too far to the left so rights of course are taken light
Lee smashin through foes without the help of Fo Fours
2 *****s in the back like DEA crashed through doors

No invite, dead night, Thriller causin strife
Miller Lite, no calories, no hope in taking flight
Complex like the cube so the soultion: cut pollution
Driving hondas cuts the cost but the drivers lack emissions

Harder than a cumbucket crack***** intervention
When the crimson tides rolls in and the pimps pulls in
I'm Muslim, kill pigs faster when and if they slim
If they packed and its tracked then the odds look grim

Called the hotline just to spit a dope rap line
But the words committ crimes and evidence is sublime
They say "stop blabbin June, ya lyin

If I cut you, u dnt bleed morphine like the IV"
Well since I'm free, lemme break it down, HIV
**** YOU, molasses *****s get traded like Kobe (triple)

If you are a slow *** *****, get off this song. Doubles and **** coded, like a ****ing WW2 Navajo message.
Hope ya'll like

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****in Houdini with the gauze, I murder without a cause
Complex without the graph, predictions whack like crack
I kill, never steal, feel and always deal
The servings of dope, walkin pharmacy sellin hope
Nevermind the rope, attachment problems back like the cloak
Back on the bus, *****s never buss so birds should hush
Speak through proxies, burn the fee with the bush, PUSH
Weight, your share, falling out of place like chemo chairs
Slippin into darkness, murky like the Loch Ness
The monster was dead, lost ashore in red, a hell sess
Blade in my hand like I'm Jacob fresh off Twilight
I'm doper than heroin soap, a GOAT whose seen the blue light
The true light, amplifying artifacts of true might
To who might, gaze into this ball and see the few nights
I do right, Claus can't leave witnesses, its bad for businesses

Goes with Copkiller instrumental. Copkiller by Mellowhype ft. Earl Sweatshirt

[Verse 1]
I never hate, always rebate or reciprocate
Favors, not Kate plus the flavor comes late
Too late, I'm here bringing fear, concentrate my dear
Concentrate like orange jews/juice, adolf simpson, better cheer
Slash victims with the butcherknife, change names like wed wife
Skip town, skip school for the colored pool fight
Tonight, comes the culmination of the flight
Meet the victim, screams fall short like midget screenlight
Heed warnings, I'm killin you all with rings, good morning
War zone like Jordan, feel 'portant when they're mourning
More sent, fools riddle Jews, don't make sense
Meanwhile my ghouls sell my dimes like I make cents
You're past tense, imperfect like you failed to climb the fence
Clench ya jaw, the paw smash is heaven sent
Hell bent on ridiculing, yet I'm straight dull edge
Bell sent like those talkin dolls, lost like u turn and there's the ledge

[Verse 2]
Gifted like Jesus left me under Christmas trees left
Out South, heft a pound of this dope, chin cleft
So I'm super, down ur **** like lumpas
Silent like a puma, on ya feet, playin Zuma
No humor, I chop the bodies up so heats 'sup
Cup a breast like its KFC, may I see ur license bub
Abuse power an hour after the Sarge called me in
Rollin in my filth, Pink sink like the blood's dim
Goddamn, Juneyah lost the cipher, smash the typewrita
Hoov Dam, stop ya flow, kill the cypher, go fasta
**** **** up like anal in the airplane
My plane, we dnt intersect, ur slow like biplanes
Not on my level, moved away from the bevel
Matter fact, buried u deep so bellow while this shovel
Smashes rocks like I'm preppin crack, mute u like young Jak
The fact is I'm untouchable, high alt Banshee Jack


WHOOOOO put some obscure mother****ing references in this **** but I love it, cannot wait till I get my equip so I can show u how I flow it and my other ****.

Was part of a collab I did yesterday

As a kid, I tried to act my shoe size, **** my age
Teacher beat my *** while wise, explains the rage
Was taught to respect size, so I walked with swagger for days
Was caught up in some lies, pretended past was in a haze

Haters said I was too short till I shot the half court ball
Told me I was dumb, changed grades like it was fall
Said I couldn't hang so I grew trees at the mall
Complained I wasn't dope so I stopped cutting them all

Now look, I'm spittin semen while they yakkin up tar (no homo)
They book a session meanwhile I buy out the whole bar
They collectin loose cents while my bricks break to dimes
U struggle to pay rent, I'm laughing you back behind

These kids cookin nothin but rocks, I'm rockin stew
*****es wet like my socks, for my ****, its not tht lewd
Whose the one scrappin plates, where's the hate u loved to place
I'm above expectations, AP at steady pace

[Hook]

[Verse 2]
With my 'rents, it wasn't what u knew or what u cud brew
For Pa it was the grades that measured how u cud do
For Ma it was the standards established that u had slew
Overall it was some bullshit I somehow managed to pull

To Pa, I was worthless so I slung rocks to buy the Payless
To Ma, I was a ***** so I hung three like they were weightless
Therapist said I was nuts, the **** didn't have one
A rapist, they said Id be, in huts wud be my first one

Yet I'm here, killin MCs and never touchin the bodies
I'm hardly ever challenged, not retarded, I charge small fees
Dope like the IV so ur lyin right beside me
Ur Bs look nice, they look nicer inside a bag see?

Anyways, I found a way and went over the bullshit
Bucked and they jumped, parkinsons or a bull's hip
Bruised lip, I left the haters with after I did vent
Success the best revenge, serve cold for late lent

Back, be droppin more **** soon, stay tuned

Goes with All Caps Instrumental (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w7owRnwkut8)

not finished, i plan to put 8 or 16 more bars in, here are 8 bars, quick write
Starts at the end of 0:21 so i guess 0:22, when the beat changes at 0:21 is when it starts

Paper beats rock so Dwanye gets locked in bars by foes
Sure he had his high and lows, pills help for poppin those
Cue my entrance like a deaf bit*h you enterin slow
Go my only speed so indeed I’m hittin does all fours
I’m the second so don’t waste a second tastin stew
The hottest bowl runs thicker than blood of ancient trees I slew
..some new shi* indicate that sap ain’t blood, who knew?
Basically, Pa don’t flow, if he do: it sleuth, no booth
My raps got me off planes like cities callin names
Bring change like Jews, you snooze, I make news, daily LAMES
MCs don’t register like they masked at registers
The expert, shoot necks to be sure, not my hemisphere
Killin these nigg*s, Grand Dragon and my Jake Long
She call you Wei Wong, got you thinkin that the time’s wrong
Me? For free, I get that sh*t up ‘gainst screens like ‘motes for Wii
“Not cheating, I’m the one” I tell hun, then smash them cheeks

BUMP THIS ****, breathe the dope