Quick 16 to Positive balance by Immortal Technique!

Yo! Nameless here! And I hope you like my quick 16 bars for this beat!
Here's tge Instrumental: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=79R5MLHo0L8

Hello, my name is Nameless/
And I'm a pretty big figure/
An easy target; tell your sniper to load and then pull the trigger/
I am what I am; My style's original/
My fame's stacked high; getcha binoculars; cuz i'm Astronomical/
I dont wanna get to lyrical/
But trust me when I tell you/
Your **** is minimal; call it*decimal/
I murder beats so bad that it's criminal/
Beats gets acid burns from my lyrical chemical/
Gun never run outta lead/
You can say that this penil is a mechanical/
Wax on wax off; Good cop bad cop/
You tested for hardness; and it came out straight soft/
Yeah I might spit that heat; but my heart is pumping straight frost/
When I party I dont get throwed/*
I come out straight tossed/

Oh and if youre reading the 16, go kinda fast but with the beat on this part:
But trust me when I tell you/
Your **** is minimal; call it*decimal/
I murder beats so bad that it's criminal/
Beats gets acid burns from my lyrical chemical/
Gun never run outta lead/
You can say that this penil is a mechanical/

Not bad the line 'mechanical, wax on wax off, came out straight soft' (some omitted) is good. My version:

[intro: slow]
So low
Go so low
Why'd she have to go so low low
x2

[16]
Yeah my girl righteous but she ain't saved
Been savin better times for a rainy day
Met this other girl and she grabbed my attention
No need to name names so I won't even mention
But this girl so low / in a different dimension
And it bring me down / even when I'm higher than I am right now
Nevermind the physical it's all in the motion
She's messin with mind / playin with my emotions
Locked in her cell never out in the open
Swimmin in the ocean crashin in the waves
But I got a good look so I let her get away
Still taunted by the love that couldn't be
I watch her take herself / into the ground
I be missin her even when she's around
For a real you a goddess / but we could never be
Had to change my focus until I couldn't see

[outro: slow]
So low
Go so low
Why'd she have to go so low low
x2

Yo! Thanks fir the feedback man! I personally like your version! "She's messin with my mind/ playin' with my emotions..." LOL ican see dr.phil sayin that ****! Love it i hope a lot more people view this forum.