People I write rap but am not good so please see ma lyrics and tell me how is it

People I write rap but am not good so please see ma lyrics and tell me how is it?
I am really tired of loving her
Protecting her,checking fb 24\7 to know what's up with her
I cry,pry,and i dont want to try
I say hi but there is no replly
Then I start to smoke weed and I hate leek
It's so lame tell me who to blame
Why did you ignore and make me moan
Doctors use kaolin and chinese use shaolin but i just use rap to describe all the crap that I had
People like to jeer but i like to cheer
Am a rap typer and i bite like a viper
pple please tell me if there is anything wrong with me

"I am really tired of loving her
Protecting her,checking fb 24\7 to know what's up with her"
I like that line and some of the other lines were alright but you need to work on a flow. Listen to alot of rap and just flow to yourself all the time to help wiht that. Use word play, alliterations, metaphors, similies, ect. Write and freestyle ALL THE TIME. If you really wanna get better it takes dedication. Like everyday type sh!t.

YO man thnx for your comment if there is any new rap lyrics I will let you know thank you