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  1. jokersall said:

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    Little Johnny was only thirteen when he came into being. Met a girl his age and like the turn of a page believed his love was real when he got the first feel of a girls breast. Not much there but it was the best. Trying an experiment we all know where his d**k went. Susie loved Johnny and agreed to try. She wanted to cry when she looked in Johnny's eye and he wasn't there. Replaced by a man who didn't care. Susie got pregnant and kicked to the streets and Johnny left to sleep with any girl he meets. Little Mary born into a world so cold with out a daddy to hold to save her from fear. Daddy to hold her near to protect her from the night. Daddy to fight the monsters so she'll be alright. To all the Susie's out there beware. Not every Johnny cares so its not always love but if your going to do it make him use a glove. And to all the Johnny's out there who think your a man of you can't wrap it keep it in your d**n hand.
    Last edited by jokersall; 10-31-2011 at 07:58 PM. Reason: radio edit
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    This was pretty good for it's subject...Work on your bar structure line for line. ...needs some work though...
    Not too bad for a new guy.
    For a title I would call it. Consequence or aftermath or somthing like that...
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep